Talk:Irene Morales/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Coemgenus (talk · contribs) 14:26, 6 January 2015 (UTC)

I'll work on this review over the next several days. --Coemgenus (talk) 14:26, 6 January 2015 (UTC)

Checklist

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments

• Sorry for the delay in starting this review. Here we go:

Early life

• Where you say "aged only 11", it reads a little awkwardly. Maybe "at age 11" or "at 11 years old". The "only" is probably unnecessary -- we're all thinking it, anyway!
  • Done.
• I'm guessing there's nothing in the sources about the name of her first husband?
  • Not in any sources I've found.

Military service

• "...to revenge her husband." I think "to avenge her husband" is the correct way to say this.
  • I suppose it sounds a bit antiquated, changed it.
• "...to concern herself with caring for the wounded." could probably just be "to care for the wounded." couldn't it?
  • Done.

Later life and legacy

• "both conservative and left-wing" Seems like this might be better as "both right- and left-wing" or, given the climate, "both conservative and socialist". Having the two terms match, in other words.
  • I think conservative is the accurate description of the said womens' movements, and I'm not sure socialist is accurate for their counterparts, so I'd rather keep it as is.
    • OK, it's fine.
• That's all I have. This was a nice little article, and I enjoyed reading it. --Coemgenus (talk) 14:00, 9 January 2015 (UTC)
  • This looks good to go. I'll pass it and update the lists accordingly. --Coemgenus (talk) 13:48, 11 January 2015 (UTC)