Talk:International Street/GA5

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 13:16, 18 April 2016 (UTC)

I shall be reviewing this against the GA criteria as part of a GAN sweep. I'll leave some comments soon. JAGUAR  13:16, 18 April 2016 (UTC)

Initial comments

• I would recommend merging the second and third paragraphs of the lead into one, to clean up the prose
  • Done.
• "When Cedar Fair took over the park, the store Thrills are Paramount changed its name to Thrills are Wonderland. The structure also includes Front Gate Photo" - this needs a citation
  • I've added in the 2006 and 2007 park maps for the name change, and pointed to the 1981 park guide and 2015 park map for the front gate photo.
• "While admissions and a dog kennel have always existed outside the front gate, one ride now exits the park. Leviathan, a roller coaster opening in 2012, encroaches into the visitor parking lot and entrance area." - this needs a citation too. Also, it reads a bit awkward as a standalone short paragraph, so I would recommend merging it into another
  • Done, but I haven't merged. While it's stubby for a paragraph, I'm not sure which paragraph it would relate to thematically, and I don't think there's additional information that I could add.
• "The 1979 plans for this building included: "Shirt printing shop, shirt and sweater shop, Hanna Barbera character hat shop, magic and novelty shop, Mediterranean decorative gifts and jewellery"" - I think this could be paraphrased without the use of quotes, but feel free to ignore. Or you could mention that this was from a 1979 report and keep the quotes?
  • Fixed, and I've given the building more of an introduction.
• "The mountain had a pathway—a circular trail—to the summit" - how about The mountain had a circular trail pathway to the summit
  • I've gone even further and removed "trail"
• The last two paragraphs in the International Showplace section can easily be merged
  • Done.
• No dead links

I found a few minor prose issues that can be cleared up (as well as a couple of unsourced sentences), but once they're all addressed this should be good to go. JAGUAR  13:42, 18 April 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for your review. As you can see, I've only had a chance to address half of your finds so far, but I'll finish this round in the next day or so. Thanks! -- Zanimum (talk) 20:42, 18 April 2016 (UTC)

@Jaguar: Okay, ready, thank you! -- Zanimum (talk) 21:55, 19 April 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for addressing them! I've gone through the article and it's in much better shape than before. With all of the issues addressed, I'll be happy to promote this. Good work JAGUAR  22:23, 19 April 2016 (UTC)

Oh wow, thank you! -- 24.114.54.17 (talk) 02:27, 23 April 2016 (UTC)