Talk:Innsmouth no Yakata/GA2
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Reviewer: Alexandra IDV (talk · contribs) 12:52, 29 May 2020 (UTC)
Will do a review of this, and hope to have it done within a few days.--AlexandraIDV 12:52, 29 May 2020 (UTC)
- Lead
- I would probably try to avoid borderline-repetition of information about the monsters in two places in the same sentence ("escaping a monster-infested mansion", "pursued by monsters"). "Pursued by monsters" is implied in the first bit, already.
- The Necronomicon should be written in italics and capitalized - titles of fictional creative works within creative works are formatted the same way as real creative works. This applies for later mentions of it in the article body, as well.
- Gameplay
- I get what you're going for, but is it appropriate to call it "twin-stick" when the controls use D-pads rather than analogue sticks?
- I believe "D-pads" (as opposed to "d-pads") is the appropriate way of referring to them?
- "These creatures can either be defeated with bullets or by fleeing." - can they actually be "defeated" by fleeing them?
- The gameplay screenshot's caption is a bit generic - describing what gameplay is being shown, for example "The player fights or flees monsters encountered while traversing the mansion." would be more helpful.
- Development
- Do we have any information on the development team - name of director, designer, etc? Did anyone of note work on it? If not, that's fine.
- Reception
- "easy difficulty" is funny wording, maybe something like "low difficulty level" would work better?
- Link sprites to sprite (computer graphics) or change it to something less technical like "graphics" or "character art" - it's the kind of term that we can't reasonably expect readers to know.
- I feel like giving more context for Ritualistic Madness would be helpful - who made it? When was it made? In what way was it influenced by Innsmouth no Yakata?
- Other issues that are not strictly necessary to fix to meet the GA criteria, but that I recommend addressing anyway
- The Jeremy Parish source is only distributed through YouTube - change the website parameter to "via"
- You're inconsistent in reference formatting - either link publishers throughout, or don't do it at all. Famitsu is the name of the magazine/work, and should be entered as such.
- It is helpful to add a language=Japanese parameter to Japanese-language references.
- The images do not have any alt texts added - these help make the article more accessible to people with impaired vision, and would be a very good addition.
Looking pretty good! There are a few issues, but nothing too major. I'll put this on hold for a week - ping me when you have addressed the issues above, or if you have any questions.--AlexandraIDV 10:59, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- Thank you, I will promote the article to GA now~!--AlexandraIDV 16:16, 1 June 2020 (UTC)