Talk:Indian Administrative Service/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Carabinieri (talk · contribs) 04:42, 13 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I'm sorry you've had to wait so long for a review. I haven't reviewed the article in detail, but here are a few initial comments:

"often abbreviated to I.A.S., or simply IAS" Do we really need both? I'd suggest simply "abbreviated IAS"
"and is an inseparable part of the executive of the Government of India" I'm not sure what that means. What would be a separable part of the government?
"As such, the bureaucracy remains politically neutral" I'm not sure what the "as such" means here.
"On attaining the apex scale" I'm not sure what that means.
Names of laws should not be italicized.
Why does the history section end in 1951?--Carabinieri (talk) 06:46, 13 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Carabinieri, hi! As I currently am on a Wikibreak, can we delay this review for a bit? I’d be much obliged. Regards, SshibumXZ (talk · contribs). 01:12, 14 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Carabinieri, I have been back from my wikibreak for than a week (sorry for not updating this earlier!), so, if it's all the same to you, should we restart the review? Regards, SshibumXZ (talk · contribs). 14:55, 1 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Carabinieri, still waiting for a response. In the meanwhile I have done I think two rounds of copy editing and will now proceed to answer your queries. Regards, SshibumXZ (talk · contribs). 20:39, 23 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Now on to your queries:

"often abbreviated to I.A.S., or simply IAS" Do we really need both? I'd suggest simply "abbreviated IAS"

Good point! The line has by and large remained the same since I started working on the article more than a year ago, but, I do see your point. I will consider your advice. The only issue I can think of here is that, I.A.S. redirects to Indian Administrative Service whereas IAS redirects to, well, IAS.

"and is an inseparable part of the executive of the Government of India" I'm not sure what that means. What would be a separable part of the government?

I am not totally sure as to what you're getting at here. Inseparable is I guess a kind-of a Commonwealth-ish term to describe the civil service, in that they they remain a part of the executive even as governments and legislatures change.

"As such, the bureaucracy remains politically neutral" I'm not sure what the "as such" means here.

It means that even after changes in the political executive, the bureaucracy supposedly remains politically neutral. As such is a continuation of the inseparable line, couple the both of them together and you'd get the intent of the paragraph.

"On attaining the apex scale" I'm not sure what that means.

The wording has now been changed to give, I hope, enough context as to what is being meant by that line.

Names of laws should not be italicized.

Yep, you're right, I somehow thought that laws need to be italicised as well; not to worry, though, I have un-italicised the names of laws, so to speak.

Why does the history section end in 1951?

Because that's when the All India Services Act, 1951 when was enacted. The history section—to me—serves its purpose by informing the average reader of the civil service, in general and the Indian Civil Service, in specific in the British Raj. The only other that can be added here I reckon would be the merger of the Indian Frontier Administrative Service (an ad-hoc creation) with the Indian Administrative Service in the 1960s. What do you advise?

That's about it for your queries, I hope that you continue with the review soon. Wishing you the very best! Regards, SshibumXZ (talk · contribs). 20:39, 23 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Looks like the reviewer Carabinieri hasn't been on wikipedia since November. I'll ping now, and hopefully they will resume. If not, I'll give this one a full review. Could you remind me SshibumXZ in a couple days? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:48, 11 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Lee Vilenski, will do. Regards, SshibumXZ (talk · contribs). 03:21, 12 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

SshibumXZ - I'm just going to go ahead and start a new review. I hope that's ok. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:29, 18 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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