Talk:India national football team at the Olympics/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 14:09, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I'll pick this one up. Review to follow. Kosack (talk) 14:09, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

@Kosack: I want to bring to your notice that I have taken the article to the peer review once for "FA" status, and I have mentioned all the reasoning there how the article was cosntructed keeping in view, all the needed criteria for FA status. Though waiting for 1 month I got no comment or suggestions. But some editors did reviwed and notified me but no comments were put or any kind of suggestions. So for this reason, I thought let the article be nominated for "GA" status if not "FA" status. But I think it could have been nominated for FA, if you think that its well enough to nominate for FA status, please let me know, what more can be done to proceed towards that. But before that let make it better or if there is any mistakes or errors, lets rectify that first. Thank you. Dey subrata (talk) 14:42, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Review

1948 Olympics

"the 1948 Games", link the first mention of the games here to the relevant year.
Coach doesn't need the capital letter.
"from easy wins", easy is slightly subjective language.
Don't disguise external links as wiki links, as you have done with Pinner FC.
"trooped out", "sailed over", "forever etching his name", "was splashed in the newspapers", some rather journalistic language is used here.
Why are you using foreign language wiki links for French players such as Guy Rouxel and René Courbin when we have pages here for them?
Stay consistent with how you use numbers. For example, we have both 11 and eleven used in concurrent paragraphs when referring to the starting line-up.

@Kosack: Done, all the above issues are resolved. the foreign language wiki link were used as when I created the article, there were no English wiki article on those players, still you can see Gunnar Dahlner article is not there, so only Gunnar Dahlner name is linked to the French wiki. Rest all other issues are done according to your concern.Dey subrata (talk) 21:02, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

1964–present

"was played by senior national teams.[1] and between these years", you've got a full stop here but the sentence carries on anyway. There are several more instances of this in the first paragraph here.
"by the Senior national team", no need to capitalise senior.

@Kosack: Above to issues are done accordingly. Dey subrata (talk) 21:05, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Records

Is there some sort of summary reference that can be included to support the table?

@Kosack: Added a summary for the records section. please let me know it need to be curtailed or not. Dey subrata (talk) 22:05, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

A summary section is good, try not to repeat too much info already used in the article. But what I meant was is there a reference that can be added to the table as it appears unsourced in its current form. Kosack (talk) 12:22, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Kosack: Sorry I missed your comment earlier, ok I will try to keep it simple. Already added the references as you asked, but the lines that I added for records are not repeated as most is about qualification round, the lines I added on match summary is looking little repetitive, So I changed keeping just one line. And added a line at the records of number of match played and win loss count. See if its ok now. Dey subrata (talk) 14:34, 21 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

The line I added at the summary is about the biggest win and biggest defeat. Dey subrata (talk) 14:48, 21 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Goal Scorers

Goalscorers is one word.

@Kosack: If you are mentioning about the image, then its corrected, I think its the only one. Dey subrata (talk) 22:16, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

The heading itself is what I was referring to. On a similar note, headings are not used in title case, so capital letters are only need for the first word. So, for example, Match Summary > Match summary and Team Squads > Team squads. Kosack (talk) 12:25, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Kosack: Missed this comment too. Ya now i think its done. Dey subrata (talk) 14:35, 21 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

References

Refs 5 and 15 are only bare urls, these need more information, publisher, dates, etc.
Avoid shouting in ref titles per WP:ALLCAPS.
The RSSSF refs all have available authors.
Some of the FIFA links appear to have expired, see if these can be recovered through archiving.

Unfortunately, I'm going to fail this one for now. There are serious grammar issues throughout that need to be addressed and fall short of the GA criteria. For example, the opening sentence "First time football played in Olympic Games", makes little sense. What I will say is that you have the starting point for a GA, content wise I think you're on the right track, you've got some good detail, but the article falls down on the grammar I'm afraid. I would suggest perhaps requesting a copyedit at the WP:GOCE for some assistance in finetuning the prose. If you can find a good copy editor willing to work on this then I think it would be worth another nomination along with the issues I noted above. Kosack (talk) 20:12, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Kosack: Surely, I will work on the issues you have discussed above and will get back to you. By the way is that ok, if I further discuss about the matter with you from time to time? Thank you. Dey subrata (talk) 20:41, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Yes of course, if you have any questions feel free to drop me a message. Kosack (talk) 20:44, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Kosack: for the reference section, I have removed all shouting, corrected those urls, added authors' names. And as you have mentioned section wise I corrected all that was listed above. But only thing I can't do is "archiving". I really don't know how to do that. Except this I think I have gone through and corrected all possible issues that you have mentioned. Please let me know if there is any other thing that to be corrected and please, that archiving I really can't do, it will be helpful if you can do it. Thank you. Dey subrata (talk) 22:51, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I'm happy to do it for you but I'll be away this weekend so my editing will be pretty light. If you want to have a crack yourself Help:Using the Wayback Machine is a good place to start. Kosack (talk) 12:28, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, let me try, if I can I will let you know. And I think you are right let me request a copy edit. That will be better to tune up the article more. Dey subrata (talk) 14:40, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Kosack: Hi, as you asked, added references to the Summary section and modified the article by adding few lines in summary and record sections. Please see if its satisfying. And tried for the archiving but failed so you please do it. Thank you in adv. Dey subrata (talk) 16:55, 20 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]