Talk:India at the 2010 Winter Olympics/GA1
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Nominator: Magentic Manifestations (talk · contribs) 15:25, 26 July 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: TheNuggeteer (talk · contribs) 05:30, 18 August 2024 (UTC)
Going to review this later, good luck! 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
05:30, 18 August 2024 (UTC)
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1. Well-written: | ||
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. | ||
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. | Everything is okay in this criterion. | |
2. Verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check: | ||
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. | Looks okay. | |
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). | ||
2c. it contains no original research. | ||
2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. | ||
3. Broad in its coverage: | ||
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. | ||
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). | ||
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. | Seems okay. | |
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. | No major reverts. | |
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6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. | The images are rightly tagged and proper. | |
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. | All the images are relevant to the topic. | |
7. Overall assessment. | Good enough for GA, passing. |
Lead
[edit]Nothing wrong! 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
12:42, 26 August 2024 (UTC)
Background
[edit]- The source also mentions that India also participated in the 1924 Winter. Alpinism was not contested as an event in the Chamonix Winter Games, which was recognized by IOC later as the first Winter Games. Medals for alpinism were given to the members of the unsuccessful 1922 British Mount Everest expedition which included seven Indian Sherpas (listed by the source) and a Nepalese, who died during the ascent. As the medalists were from various nationalities (Britain/India/Nepal), it is officially credited to mixed team by the IOC and not credited to India. Will add it as a note if required.
- Source 6 includes more information and reception about Gupta. Have expanded the section.
the athletes required aid from various private sponsors including uniforms donated by Indo-Canadians
add 'the' before Indo-Canadians, who from the Indo-Canadians? Expanded.
- Say that source 7 needs registration.#7 is NYT source. It is fully accessible and does not need registration. (May be it is country specific from where you are trying to access). It also has an archived link, which has the same text. Do not see any issues with it.
Tashi Lundup served as
add 'also' before served.🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
12:42, 26 August 2024 (UTC)
Competitors
[edit]- Why is there a &ndash here? The &ndash is clearly shown.
Three Indian athletes competed in the event
Add 'including' after the sentence. As a dash has been introduced, I guess this is not necessary as it lists the only three athletes participating.
🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
12:42, 26 August 2024 (UTC)
Alpine skiing
[edit]- If possible, can you state the page for source 16? (use the {{rp}} template).
- Change
and trained at the
towere part of the
. tweaked🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
12:42, 26 August 2024 (UTC)
Cross-country skiing
[edit]that they satisfied
remove 'they'. tweaked- If possible, can you state the page for source 16?
- Change
and trained at the
towere part of the
. tweaked🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
12:42, 26 August 2024 (UTC)
Luge
[edit]one for the hosts
change 'for' to 'of'. "of" will not make sense here as the spot was allocated "for the hosts". I have rather removed the part itself as it is not relevant to Indian qualification. Reworded and tweaked the entire section for better readability. See if it is ok.🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
12:42, 26 August 2024 (UTC)- Everything looks good, passing.
🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
11:38, 28 August 2024 (UTC)
- Everything looks good, passing.
Will review the rest later. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
12:42, 26 August 2024 (UTC)
- I think everything else seems okay! You can fix the problems though.
🍗TheNuggeteer🍗
03:46, 28 August 2024 (UTC)
@🍗TheNugg, I have addressed the comments. Please do let me know if you have any further comments/feedback. Thanks! Magentic Manifestations (talk) 06:08, 28 August 2024 (UTC)