Talk:In the Zone/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 01:34, 7 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

However, she started -> why however? She did in fact stop for 6 months. July to November Done
Others criticized -> others however, criticized Done
I won't hold it against you but you know I hate that 6 million thing
- lol, sorry!
"Me Against the Music" and "Toxic" became worldwide hits, and "Everytime" peaked at number one in Australia and the United Kingdom -> change. Also it doesn't make such sense. "Everytime" was just as successful if not more so than MATM Done
live appearances -> television Done

4 million copies only in the United States -> take out only Done
However, she revealed in November 2002 that she had started working on her next studio album -> again, that was six months later Done
Spears's -> Spears' Done

In the Zone sold 609,000 copies in the United States in its first week -> sold 609,000 during its first week of availability in the United States Done
In the Zone debuted at number thirteen on the UK Albums Chart, where it stayed for forty-three weeks. -> sounds like it stayed at #13 for that long. Re-word Done

According to MOS, I believe each single should not have its own paragraph. Bunch it like a regular section. Done

sued for trademark infringement -> why?
- added that it was for 'in the zone'. Done

- Overall great job! You are really improving, I really had a breeze reading through it. Great work :)--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 05:13, 11 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - Thanks so much! Xwomanizerx (talk) 10:32, 11 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]