Talk:Imelda (film)/GA1

GA Review

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:47, 7 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Lead is weak, it doesn't describe the film really at all, and heads straight for reviewers' comments.
" $200,000 at the US box office with an additional US$300,000" you link the second US$ but just have an unlinked $ the first time.
"It holds very favourable" It received...
You link Marcos but not First Lady in the lead but then you link First Lady and not Marcos in the opening paragraph of the Synopsis section.
"her whirlwind romance" reads like a tabloid.
We have an article on Human rights in the Philippines you could link to.
"met Douglas MacArthur during" perhaps just add "General" in here so we can better put this meeting into context.
"why she got the lyrics wrong" -> "why she sang the lyrics incorrectly"
"Imelda in 2006." any reason why this shouldn't be "Marcos in 2006"?
"The film had its world premiere" ->" The film's world premiere..."
"and had its North American premiere" ->"while its North American premiere was..."
"within Maryland Film " -> "at the Maryland..."
Our article on Film Threat italicises the title.
"San Francisco Chronicle said " -> "The San Francisco Chronicle said "
It appears that Spiderman 2 is actually called "Spider-Man 2".
References could use filling out, e.g. adding retrieval dates and publication dates where appropriate, see WP:CITESTYLE.
"Comedy film" is a category, is this serious?

A few issues, so this is on hold for a week. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:33, 9 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed most of them.--♥ 14:53, 11 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

When do you plan to fix the rest of them? The Rambling Man (talk) 14:59, 11 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

*Actually, I have fixed all of them. the only thing I disagree with is using her last name versus her first. The use of her first name is widely used in many publications and I think that's fine based on mononym, Leonardo da Vinci, and WP:PRIMARYTOPIC.--♥^(Theparties) 09:52, 13 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

&Fine. I'll fix it.--♥^(Theparties) 09:52, 13 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]