Talk:Illinois Tollway oasis/GA2

GA Reassessment

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
The writing and such are mostly fine, but I have several comments that should be resolved.
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
See below.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
This is fine.
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
This is also good.
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
The third photo caption is not a full sentence and shouldn't have terminal punctuation.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
The sourcing issues need to be resolved so that this can stay listed. I'm holding the article for seven days before delisting. Imzadi 1979 → 00:12, 17 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Prose comments

Why is "Oasis" capitalized in the lead sentence, but not the article title? Is it a proper noun or a common noun? Either way, the discrepancy should be resolved by moving the article, or dropping the cap in the sentence.
An "interstate highway" is any highway that crosses state lines; an "Interstate Highway" is a component of the Dwight D. Eisenhower National System of Interstate and Defense Highways, regardless if that component, like I-294 or I-355, does not cross a state line. I would audit the article to verify that the capitalization is correct.
The "Description and current status" section could use a copy edit. The prose uses many repetitions of the words "oasis" or "oases", when alternate words like "location", "site", etc can be substituted for variety.
"The Tollway" isn't the name of the agency that owns these facilities. The proper name is the Illinois State Toll Highway Authority, which is abbreviated ISTHA. We shouldn't be using colloquial terms to refer to the agency when its official name and abbreviation are already given in the article.
"They featured Standard Oil (Amoco) gas stations and Fred Harvey restaurants, and were something of a novelty in the region - becoming destinations in and of themselves for driving customers." That sentence has a dash error [the hyphen should be either a spaced en dash (–) or an unspaced em dash (—)]. Not in the GA criteria, but an easy fix all the same. Second, I don't think that comma should be present since it's not a compound sentence (the second half after the conjunction can't stand alone as a proper sentence because it doesn't have a subject).
The external link to http://www.cordoganclark.com/ doesn't belong in the middle of the prose. It's not even needed for the External links section. It belongs in an article about the firm, which would be wikilinked to this article.
"new buildings large expanses of glass" should have an appostrophe after the "s" in buildings... the buildings own the expanses of glass.
" 25 year lease" should be hyphenated as, "25-year lease".
"This investigation, reported on 30 December 2005, ..." please switch the date format to US standard, or "December 30, 2005, ..."
We need some consistency in the name of the political fundraiser. The first mention, which probably should be dropped for clarity since it appears in parentheses after the former governor's name, uses "Antoin" as his first name. The next time he's mentioned, it's just "Tony". In addition, both are linked. While changing this series of sentences, please update the fact that Blagojovich isn't the governor anymore.
There's some over-citation in the next paragraph since footnote 14 is repeated for five consecutive sentences, none of which are really controversial enough to warrant individual citation under WP:BLP. Can we drop all but the last one?
"six story factory building" should be "six-story factory building"... another compound adjective involving a number.
"The seven oases are spread along the Tollway, ..." The are not on a single tollway, rather on the tollway system. Since that's not a proper noun, it should not be capitalized.
"east-west" should have an en dash (–) not a hyphen, which does change the meaning.
"The only Tollway that does not ..." again, tollway on its own is not a proper noun and should not be capitalized.

Sourcing issues

Footnote 13 is a self-published source that does not meet the policy exception. It needs to be replaced.
Footnote 22 is a message board posting. It needs to be replaced.
Citation for "Now,the covenience stores on the Illinois Tollway are operated by 7 Eleven". While we're add it, clean up the formatting for that, and specify as of when the change was made.
There's an external link to IMDb for the Blue Brothers factoid. IMDb is not a reliable source, because it contains reader-submitted information.

I already cleaned up the references to make them consistent with each other in terms of formatting and content. All of the Daily Herald articles have dead links now though. As a result, I could not add the title of the August 15, 2009 by Joseph Ryan and John Patterson. It would be nice if someone could find that title, and maybe archived versions of the articles. Imzadi 1979 → 00:12, 17 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Since only one of the comments above was addressed, and then only partially, I'm sadly delisting the article. Imzadi 1979 → 20:45, 24 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]