Talk:If I Don't Have You/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 06:17, 12 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Soon, Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:17, 12 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 06:32, 12 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

and Streamline Records. It replaced → and Streamline Records, replacing (it sounds better, is not very long and avoids the repetition of "it")

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:25, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

song was written by Tamar Braxton → unlink "Tamar Braxton" and only use her last name

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:25, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

and Tiyon "TC" Mack. → and Tiyon "TC" Mack, while production was solely handled by Da Internz

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:25, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

for the 58th Annual Grammy Awards → at the...

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:25, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

on the R&B/Hip-Hop Airplay Billboard chart. → remove "Billboard" here

The Billboard part is necessary to clarify that it is a Billboard chart. Aoba47 (talk) 16:25, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

In the accompanying music video, Braxton → In an accompanying music video released on June 9, 2015, Braxton

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:25, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

The visuals feature American → The visual features American

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:25, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

The video received positive → replace "the video" with "the clip" to avoid repetition

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:25, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

Everything seems on point here ;)

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:27, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Background and release

Nothing I can really complain about! Well-written!

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:28, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Composition and lyrics

The instrumental includes a piano.[8] The song focuses → Its instrumentation includes a piano,[8] while the song focuses (to avoid short, clipped sentences)

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Music sample > Include the fact that it's an R&B song in its description

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

for the 58th Annual → at the...

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:46, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

that would appeal listeners → that would appeal to listeners

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:46, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

wrote that the song → replace "the song" with "the track" to avoid repetition

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:46, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

was appropriate for those "the mood for a good cry (or perhaps an all-out profound wail)" → I think a word's missing here or something because it doesn't make any sense

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:46, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

R&B/Hip-Hop Airplay Billboard chart on → Remove "Billboard" here

See above comment about this. Aoba47 (talk) 16:46, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Music video

The accompanying music video → An accompanying music video

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:50, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Prior to its release → replace "release" with "premiere" to avoid repetition

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:50, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

A majority of the video → replace "video" with "clip" or "visual" to a. r.

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:50, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

It ends with Braxton → replace "Braxton" with "the singer" to a. r.

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:50, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Please connect the third with the fourth paragraph; they deal with similar content and having so many (thin) paras for a section is not appropriate

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:50, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

received a positive response → you don't need the "a" here, but can leave it as it is if you want to

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:50, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Track listing

Flawless ;)

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Credits and personnel

Flawless ;)

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Charts

Flawless ;)

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Release history

Flawless ;)

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Other stuff

Copy-violation

27.5% is acceptable!

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Media

Sample seems stable

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

References

As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article
No dead links! Good job!

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:32, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Outcome

On hold for 7 days! Good job! I also like the song, and I took the time to watch its video entirely on YouTube (). Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:01, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: Thank you for your review. I believe that I have addressed everything. I hope you enjoyed the video. Aoba47 (talk) 16:52, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Gladly passing! Congrats; Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:26, 17 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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