Talk:I Turn My Camera On/GA1

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Reviewer: Kingsif (talk · contribs) 16:01, 30 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I'm Kingsif, and I'll be doing this review. This is an automated message that helps keep the bot updating the nominated article's talkpage working and allows me to say hi. Feel free to reach out and, if you think the review has gone well, I have some open GA nominations that you could (but are under no obligation to) look at. Kingsif (talk) 16:01, 30 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Sources

Amazon is used a few times for CD spec, release dates, etc - is there no better source for this?
- There is a page for the vinyl single on 45cat, which can be used as the source for the track listing, as well as on AllMusic, which can be used as a source for the release date. Would this be better?
  - @Aria1561: Those would be great. Kingsif (talk) 17:51, 30 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    - @Kingsif: Done Aria1561 (talk) 18:11, 30 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Other sources look good, used appropriately, I can't see OR
Everything has inline citation except a quote in the lead and composition section, where refs should be added (looks like Hilton, Robin (December 8, 2015). "Spoon's Britt Daniel Explains How He Made 'Gimme Fiction,' Track By Track". NPR Music. Retrieved August 15, 2019 in both cases)
- Done

Illustration

Fair use cover in infobox, short song clip used well
Free, licensed, image of Britt Daniel that's relevant
Infobox and tables suitable, good use of split columns in personnel

Prose

Lead might be a little long for the article
- The composition info in the second paragraph might be too detailed, this part could be cut back
- Done, somewhat — I took a little out, though I feel what I left is a sufficient amount of information about the song to have in the lead.
Background section good
I feel like the Composition section is a bit upside down - surely it should talk about the meaning and how Daniel wrote it before saying who recorded what parts? Is all of the personnel info needed in this section anyway?
- Done — Would just like to note that I started the section off originally with information about the music first because, to my knowledge, Britt Daniel began writing the music before the lyrics, so I felt it was appropriate to start that way. I took out the technical personnel aspects from the Composition section, though I felt the bits about who produced the song along with Britt Daniel and Jim Eno's instrumental contributions were important enough to keep.
The sentences at the end of the Release section (It was also used in a commercial for car manufacturer Jaguar.[22] The song was also used in a viral video featuring the miniature research robot Keepon, in which the robot dances to the song. The video has garnered millions of views on YouTube since its release) could be consolidated to read better, e.g. "...Jaguar, and in a viral video... the song. The Keepon video..."
- Done
Reception is good

Overall

A few concerns, but not much. Nice article. Kingsif (talk) 16:20, 30 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- @Kingsif: Thanks for reviewing the article! I have made some changes in accordance with your review. Aria1561 (talk) 17:45, 30 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - @Aria1561: Nice work! Kingsif (talk) 18:13, 30 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]