Talk:I Rise (song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 21:08, 13 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Will get round to this tomorrow --Kyle Peake (talk) 21:08, 13 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Replace hlist with bullet points and no flatlist either
Target 12" to Twelve-inch single
Recorded date is unsourced
Link to the music video in the infobox

I don't know how to link it as it's not available on YouTube, only on Time website

"is a song recorded by American singer-songwriter" → "is a song by American singer-songwriter"
"for her fourteenth studio album" → "from her fourteenth studio album,"
"Written by the singer herself" → "The song was written by the singer herself"
"by Madonna and Evigan," → "by Madonna and Evigan." since the sentence is too long currently
"it was released on May 3, 2019," → "It was released on May 3, 2019,"
Target promotional single to Promotional recording
Mention that the release was through Interscope and for the following one, identify as "the aforementioned label"
"as the album's third single" → "as the third single" since we know it's from the album and add the target
""I Rise" is a mid tempo pop song track" → "The song is a mid tempo pop track" with the appropriate wikilink
"and contains a sample" → "while it contains a sample" with the target
"Madonna's 48th number-one single" → "Madonna's 48th chart-topping single"
"the top ten on the digital charts" → "the top 10 of the digital charts"
"An accompanying music video for the song was" → "An accompanying music video was" with the wikilink
"being directed by Peter Matkiwsky" → "which was directed by Peter Matkiwsky"
"It features footage of" → "The video features footage of"
Target LGBTQ supporters to LGBT social movements
""I Rise" was performed during Madonna's set on" → "The song was performed during Madonna's set at"

Background and composition

Remove wikilink on Lisbon, Portugal and solely wikilink Lisbon to itself
"seeking a top football academy" → "when seeking a top football academy"
Mention David's surname
"artists, painters and musicians, who" → "artists; painters and musicians, who"
"In these sessions, they" → "In the sessions, they"
"bring food, sit around the table and" → "bring food and sit around the table, and"
"is the soul of the universe"." → "is the soul of the universe."" since punctuation should be inside quotes for full sentence(s)
"had previously worked on her albums" → "had previously contributed to her albums"
"and to love themselves"." → "and to love themselves.""
"while production was in charge of the singer" → "while production was handled by the singer"
Wikilink tempo to itself
"which lyrically deals about" → "that lyrically deals about"
"highs and lows of her career"," → "highs and lows" of Madonna's career,"
Target sample to Sampling (music)
"from a Stoneman Douglas High School shooting survivor" → "from Stoneman Douglas High School shooting survivor" for grammar fixing
"speech in which she" → "speech, in which she"
"Later on the track, the word" → "Later within the track, the words"
"later echoes at the end" → "are echoed at the end"
"what's been done to you"." → "what's been done to you.""
"on May 3, 2019 as the" → "on May 3, 2019, as the"
Target promotional single to Promotional recording
Mention the label for both releases, respectively
Target single to Single (music)
The release info should not be at the end of this section directly after composition info, especially with the title; move it to the start of the following section and retitle to Release and reception

Critical reception

"received generally positive reviews" → "was met with generally positive reviews"
"but selected it as one of the" → "but selected the track as one of the"
Target ballad to Sentimental ballad
Target LGBTQ+ community to LGBT community
"For Nick Smith from MusicOMH" → "Writing for musicOMH, Nick Smith"
"and complimented González's sample" → "and complimented the González sample"
"classified it as a" → "classified the track as a"
"whose "heartfelt lyrics" sounded" → "with "heartfelt lyrics" that sounded"
"and also noted its" → "and also noted the"
"had "elegant, sinewy melodies" → "has "elegant, sinewy melodies"
"from MTV, called it" → "from MTV called it"
"He further wrote that it was" → "He further wrote that the song was"
"once more why she's pop's" → "once more" as to why Madoona is "pop's"
"and praised its lyrical message" → "and praised the lyrical message"
"the Jean-Paul Sartre quote on the song" → "the song's Sartre quote"
The Slant Magazine review can be in an Accolades sub-section of this section
In the above case, "with reviewer Sal Cinquemani writing," → "For the magazine, Sal Cinquemani wrote,"
"rhetoric nearly robotic"." → "rhetoric nearly robotic.""
"who complimented its production" → "who complimented the production"
"wasn't impressed with its chorus and creativity" → "wasn't impressed with the song's chorus and level of creativity"
"category at the" → "award at the"
This award will go under Accolades too
"became the first woman to win a Grammy in this category" → "became the first woman to win the award" since we know which award it is

Chart performance

Retitle to Commercial performance
"The song later reached number one" → "The song ultimately reached the summit of the chart"
"number-one single on the aforementioned chart in its August 31, 2019 issue" → "chart-topping single on it for the issue date of August 31, 2019"
"At the year-end Hot Dance Club Songs recap" → "On the year-end US Dance Club Songs chart"
"was at number 31 position" → "ranked at number 31"
"It also debuted on" → "The song debuted at"
"number 37 on the" → "number 37 on the US"
"on the issue dated July 13, 2019" → "for the issue dated July 13, 2019"
"It became her 15th entry on the chart and her first" → "This gave Madonna her 15th entry on the chart and her 1st" per MOS:NUM
"on the week dated May 20, 2019" → "on the week of May 20, 2019"
"The song also peaked at" → "The song further peaked at"
"on its national chart" → "on the national chart"
"while in Scotland the song peaked at number 45 on the issue dated May 10, 2019" → "while the song peaked at number 45 on the Scottish Singles Chart for the week ending May 10, 2019"
""I Rise" also reached number 40" → ""I Rise" reached number 40"

Music video and live performances

Img needs alt text
Main text needs a full-stop at the end
"to create a video inspired by "I Rise"," → "to create a music video for "I Rise"," since that is what you are touting it as; include the wikilink
"footage of Stoneman Douglas High School shooting" → "footage of the Stoneman Douglas High School shooting"
Target LGBTQ supporters to LGBT social movements
"and other social justice movements" → "among other social justice movements"
"Mike Wass from Idolator commented that the video" → "Wass commented that the clip"
"The first performance of" → "The first live performance of"
Wikilink imagery to itself
"wore an eye-patch with an X, which was designed..." not backed up properly by the source?
"background dancers were decked as police officers wielding" → "background dancers were dressed as police officers that wielded"
"After the performance fireworks" → "After the performance, fireworks"
"as the encore of the singer's" → "as the encore during Madonna's" with the wikilink
"began with the screen showing González's speech" → "began with González's speech being presented on the screen"
[47][48] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
"and Madonna and her dancers exited" → "followed by Madonna and her dancers exiting"
WP:RSP writes against Forbes so remove or replace this
"her stop at London's London Palladium on" → "her stop at the London Palladium in the city of the same name on"
"while Madonna was performing the song" → "when Madonna performed the song"
"as she went past the deadline" → "as she went past her deadline"
Wikilink a capella to itself
"It angered the singer" → "This angered the singer"
Wikilink Instagram to itself
"to accuse the venue of trying" → "for accusing the venue of trying"

Track listing

Retitle to Track listings
Remove (Album Version) from the title of the first release
(Remixes Pt. 2) → (Remixes) since there is nobody but Tracy Young for the first remixes release

Personnel

Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between personnel

Charts

Weekly charts

Target HRT to Hrvatska radiotelevizija

Year-end charts

Good

Release history

Format → Format(s)
Refs should have their own col and be centered
Change Various to having a rowspan of 3 since it is three consecutive rows
Italy should cite Universal as the label instead

References

[Copyvio score https://copyvios.toolforge.org/?lang=en&project=wikipedia&oldid=&action=search&use_engine=1&use_links=1&turnitin=1&title=I_Rise_%28song%29] is too high at 50.3% for the Paper ref; this has to be fixed
Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
Ref 5 should have no date parameter and cite Tidal as publisher instead with the target to Tidal (service)
Ref 11 should cite Madonna as the publisher instead
musicOMH should be cited as work/website instead for ref 15
Target HRT to Hrvatska radiotelevizija for ref 35
Fix MOS:QWQ issues with refs 41 and 43
Cite Sun-Sentinel instead for ref 47
Remove or replace ref 50 per WP:RSP
Ref 52 should be titled "I Rise by Madonna on Amazon Music" and cite Amazon (US) as publisher
Add language parameter for ref 53
Add "by Madonna on iTunes" to the titles of refs 54 and 55
Use the multiple citations on a ref style for both to verify the releases were various

Sorry, but I didn't understand what you meant here.

Take the passed GA "All Day" for example. --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:19, 15 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@11JORN: You have not made this fix properly; I meant as in cite various countries, but do it separately for both respective releases. --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:25, 17 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Kyle Peake: I'm really confused on what you meant here... Alex ^{reach me!} 21:59, 17 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

11JORN Use the same template under the various release for digital download in the "All Day" article for the two separate "Remixes" releases that are cited in the article, making sure for both to add links to Apple Music from multiple countries. --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:02, 18 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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