Talk:I Do Do/GA1

GA Review

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GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality: Since the suggestions were addressed .
I would try to break this sentence up into a couple smaller ones: "Liz Lemon (Tina Fey), who is scheduled to do a reading at the ceremony, wastes time so that her boss, Jack Donaghy (Alec Baldwin), after sending her a text message to stall for time, can talk things over with Nancy Donovan (Julianne Moore), following his admission to being in love with both her and Avery Jessup (Elizabeth Banks)."

Article says: "Liz tells him that fate brought them together so that she meet Carol whom she can see spending the rest of her life with." Suggested: "...so that she would meet Carol, with whom she can see herself spending the rest of her life." Teacher says "Never end a sentence with a preposition." Article says:"...and gives a speech rant at his former co-workers." Suggested: "...and gives and ranting speech to his former co-workers." Article says: "I Do Do" was written by series creator, executive producer and lead actress Tina Fey and directed by series producer Don Scardino. I would insert a comma after "Fey".

Really long sentence: Nancy tells Jack that she cannot share him with another woman,[suggest end on sentence] saying [replace with 'She said,"] "I can't share you with another woman like you're that Mormon guy on HBO who was in that tornado movie",[suggest end of sentence] this [replace with:"Her statement"] is a reference to actor Bill Paxton [, who appeared in the 1996 movie Twister [wikilink movie], and currently stars in the HBO show Big Love, a show about a fundamentalist Mormon family in Utah who practice polygamy,[end sentence] and who appeared in the 1996 movie Twister. My reason for moving Twister reference is: if I did not know anything about Twister I would forget about the reference to it in the characters quote by the time I got to the end of that long sentence.

"Meredith Blake, writing for the Los Angeles Times, wrote that Damon "was perfectly" as his character." Extending the quote to say "was perfectly Damon-esque" would sound better.

B. MoS compliance:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

I am finished with my part of the review. Awaiting opinion of User:Belovedfreak. --Ishtar456 (talk) 14:04, 30 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I got all the concerns you left, Ishtar. Now, I'll be waiting for Belovedfreak's. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 22:07, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Beloved Freak 22:50, 29 June 2010 (UTC) (I will be reviewing with User:Ishtar456.)[reply]

Good work ThinkBlue, I'm happy to list this as a GA.--Beloved Freak 12:57, 2 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]