Talk:I Choose You (Keyshia Cole song)/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:08, 23 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Seeing a Keyshia Cole nomination is something different, therefore I thought I'd give this one a go! --K. Peake 09:08, 23 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Recording date is unsourced in the body
WP:OVERLINK of Keyshia Cole under songwriters
Link to the music video in the infobox
"for her fifth studio album" → "for her fifth studio album,"
Cole should come first in songwriters since this is how she's listed and she is also the primary artist
"with production handled by the former." → "with the production being handled by Splash."
Make the release sentence the one directly after writing/production
""I Choose You" is an R&B ballad with lyrics revolving around" → "An R&B ballad, its lyrics revolve around Cole"
"which of the two." → "which man she wants."
"the song was sent to urban radio" → "The song was sent to US urban contemporary radio stations" with the wikilink
Mention that it was as the album's third and final single directly after the first part to be less wordy, also add the record labels it was sent by after the release date
"To promote the single," → "To promote the song," plus move this to being at the end of the second para and italicise 106 & Park
Pipe music critics to Music journalism
Remove "with" before many of whom
""I Choose You" reached number 18 on the official" → "In the United States, it reached number 18 on the" removing all of the previous commercial info, as it is unsourced and comparisons to other tracks are not notable for the lead in this context anyway
In the video sentence, mention when the premiere was and add a sentence about the synopsis afterwards

Recording and release

Retitle to Background and composition, merging the below section
"was written by Keyshia Cole," → "was written by Cole,"
For proper background info, Elijah Blake's involvement on the album from Life + Times source should be directly after the writing and production sentence; add relevant parts of her comments on working on the album too
"Lundon Knighten,[1][2] and it" → "and Lundon Knighten,[1][2] while it"
Pipe mastered to Mastering (audio)
Remove Jon Parales' quote since this opinion does not add any background info
Add the information about the song being intended for Carey and Cole's quote on its development after the mixing/mastering
Move the release info to being at the top of the reception section in a para of its own since that area is too short
"was released and sent to" → "was released to US" to be specific and use the word stations afterwards
Pipe single to Single (music)
"from Cole's fifth studio album Woman to Woman (2012);" → "from Woman to Woman;"
[5] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [8]
Add that the previous releases were in 2012
"it was debated as the second single," → "the song was debated as the second single,"
"Cole often cites" → "Cole has cited"

Composition and lyrics

Move this to being the second para of the above section, as there is not enough info for two paras here
""I Choose You" is an" → "Musically, "I Choose You" is an"
Either use a different source for R&B or remove the genre, as AllMusic sidebar is not reliable
Pipe ballad to Sentimental ballad
Can't you source any more info about the actual composition, as you only have one sentence on that front? To help you out, I would suggest checking the album review sources.
While moving the Elijah Blake info to background and adding more, remember the source is about her involvement so its not correct to say the song was written by her and use the actual title for Cole's album
"and presented to" → "and presented to both" but the Mariah Carey part is not mentioned by the source
"Jennifer Hudson before it got to" → "Jennifer Hudson, before reaching"
Italicise 106 & Park and introduce it as being BET's
"Cole is forced to choose" → "Cole is forced to choose between"
"consists of Cole singing:" → "includes Cole singing:" and start at "And if it ain't you" since the source's quote begins from that point, unless you can find a source mentioning the full chorus
Singersroom should not be italicised
"lets listeners believe that she" → "makes listeners understand that Cole" to not be too close to the source in wording

Reception

Retitle to Release and reception, making the release info the first para
None of the sources actual say the reviews were positive overall, so keep the statement but remove these apart from The New York Times ref, which can be used for a separate sentence offering a review of the song
"received positive reviews" → "was met with positive reviews"
Pipe music critics to Music journalism
"John Ricard of the BET website viewed" → "John Ricard of BET viewed"
Remove "on it" from the end of the above sentence, as that is implied by this being a review of the song
Mention that the Rated R&B reviewer picked it as a standout track on the album
"on Billboard's Adult R&B Songs" → "on the US Billboard Adult R&B Songs"
"for eighteen weeks." → "for 18 weeks." per MOS:NUM

Music video

Wikilink music video on the img text
"was filmed around August 2013" → "was filmed during August 2013" per both sources using this month
Remove wikilink on Los Angeles, California
Remove wikilink on BET
Italicise 106 & Park with no wikilink
"and did an" → "and provided an"
The digital platforms release is unsourced and if you can source it, mention in a separate sentence
Pipe black-and-white to Black and white
The outfit should be the second sentence of the second para, moving the story to being after the first comma instead
Remove the word fabulous because that is not neutral language here
"The video displays a story of" → "a story is displayed of"
Merge the later sentence about her dress with the other one, adding a semi-colon and writing "she is also shown" instead
"while singing to the" → "as she sings to the"
Like the reception section, none of the sources say reviews were positive overall; remove this statement anyway since there is not enough to verify it
"with her hairstyle and look being compared" → "The singer's hairstyle and look were compared"
"as "hunks".[30] Taylor interpreted them as one being" → "as "hunks", interpreting one as being"

Credits and personnel

Credits were adapted from → Credits adapted from
Mention the studios since they are taken from the credits; use a recording sub-heading for them and personnel for the rest
Wikilink/pipe any of the personnel to the appropriate articles
Pipe mastering to Mastering (audio)

Charts

See MOS:TABLECAPTION

References

Copyvio score looks passable at 35.9%
Wikilink Life + Times to itself on ref 2 per MOS:LINK2SECT
New York Times → The New York Times on ref 3, citing as work/website instead and author-link Jon Pareles
Ref 4 is a duplicate of ref 1
Fix MOS:QWQ issues with refs 5, 10 12
Ref 7 has been italicised due to usage of single speech marks twice at the end of the title; change this to once
Cite Idolator as work/website instead on ref 8 and fix MOS:QWQ issues
Cite DJ Whoo Kid as author instead on ref 9 with an author-link and use the via parameter for YouTube
Remove or replace ref 11 per my earlier comment about sidebar reliability
Only cite BET on refs 14 and 22, doing this as publisher and wikilinking on the first one
Remove the publisher from ref 15 and fix MOS:QWQ issues
Cite Jet as work/website instead on ref 17
Ditto for Rated R&B on ref 18 and SoulTracks on ref 19
Remove the publisher from ref 21
Remove the publisher from ref 23
Townsquare Media, Inc → Townsquare Media on ref 24
Cite 107.3 Kiss FM as publisher instead on ref 29 and remove Townsquare Media, Inc altogether from this one
Cite Essence as work/website instead on ref 30

External links

Remove the music video from here

Final comments and verdict

On hold until everything is resolved; slightly messy, but not bad at all for a first GAN! --K. Peake 12:20, 23 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Just replying to let you know that I have now followed each and every instruction you have given. You can now review it again and check to see if it meets the GA criteria. Fullmoon211 (talk) 00:48, 24 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Fullmoon211 The correct term would be read through in this context and now I've done that, I copyedited in a few areas where minor mistakes were made but elsewise, the only things you need to do now are re-add the Life + Times source for background info on Elijah Blake's involvement and include him under songwriters in the infobox! --K. Peake 07:06, 24 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

K. Peake I have now included him in the songwriters list on the infobox and also added background info on his involvement along with the Life + Times source being re-added for it. I hope that everything looks fine now. --Fullmoon211 (talk) 11:57, 24 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Fullmoon211 It looks better, but you should add the brief quote about his relationship with Cole. --K. Peake 12:13, 24 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

K. Peake Okay! I've now added the quote about their relationship along with the fact that he has written several songs on the album right after the songwriting/production information in the Background section.--Fullmoon211 (talk) 15:28, 24 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Fullmoon211 ✓ Pass time, I did do a copyedit for Elijah Blake's name to comply with Wiki policy but elsewise, fantastic work here! --K. Peake 18:08, 24 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]