Talk:I Can Transform Ya/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: (CK)Lakeshade✽talk2me 22:34, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

Issues

I am beginning the review :) (CK)Lakeshade✽talk2me 22:34, 25 June 2010 (UTC) "It also peaked in the top twenty of the United States, at twenty-one in Australia and Ireland. It also charted in the top thirty in the United Kingdom, becoming a top ten hit on the UK R&B Chart." You have two back to back sentences with the same opening line, please rephrase one or the other.  Done "The song was set to be the first real record that Brown had released since his altercation with then-girlfriend Rihanna at the beginning of the year." Needs to have a source right after, or it falls under original research.  Done "The song, influenced by hip-hop and rock, has been described as "upbeat tune",[...] Grammer, should be described as an  Done aCharts is used throughout the article, needs to be replaced.  Done, with the exception of Australia which I explained. A fair amount of dab links, please see here  Done Alright, simple issues, please work to correct them ASAP. Other than that great work on the article. (CK)Lakeshade✽talk2me 22:34, 25 June 2010 (UTC) Regarding the Critical reception section, could you expand it? Each review is only like 1 sentence. Chart performance could use minor expansion. Somewhat short considering it could be much longer. (CK)Lakeshade✽talk2me 21:34, 26 June 2010 (UTC) Ehhh, lol. As for the critical reception, I've scoured single and album reviews for the few weeks I went back and worth working the article and that is as much as I could find. Also, Billboard really didn't cover the song so it was hard to develop any interesting facts or anything to inject the chart performance with. Candyo32 (talk) 21:45, 26 June 2010 (UTC) Reading it again the only real outstanding issue i found was synth-pop being included in the genres section because its not mentioned in the article (maybe it is but i didnt locate it, inform me if im wrong) (CK)Lakeshade✽talk2me 05:18, 27 June 2010 (UTC)  Done

References

Ref Issues : ref [1] → work=MTV News publisher=MTV Networks (Viacom) (No Italics)  Done ref [2] → work=MTV News publisher=MTV Networks (Viacom) (No Italics) (De Link)  Done ref [3] → work=MTV News publisher=MTV Networks (Viacom) (No Italics) (De Link)  Done ref [6] → work=MTV News publisher=MTV Networks (Viacom) (No Italics) (De Link)  Done ref [5] → work=Los Angeles Times publisher=Tribune Company  Done ref [12] → work=About.com publsiher=he New York Times Company (No Italics)  Done ref [23] → remove italics  Done ref [24] → remove italics  Done ref [25] → work=MTV News publisher=MTV Networks (Viacom) (No Italics) (De Link)  Done ref [26] → work=MTV News publisher=MTV Networks (Viacom) (No Italics) (De Link)  Done Part 2: ref [5] → Your missing a closing ref or something, not formatted correctly  Done ref [11] → work=New York Times publsiher=NY Holdings  Done ref [13] → Remove italics  Done

Prose

:GA review (see here for criteria) It is reasonably well written. a (prose): b (MoS): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions): Overall: Pass/Fail: (CK)Lakeshade✽talk2me 09:33, 29 July 2010 (UTC)