Talk:I Am the Club Rocker/GA1
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Reviewer: HĐ (talk · contribs) 04:54, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
Sorry for the delay. Full review coming soon. — Simon (talk) 04:51, 25 May 2016 (UTC)
- Lead
"additional producing" → production- "major success" → "major" sounds biased
- "it reached number eight in its second charting week on the Mexican Albums Chart, after debuting at number 53 in September 2011" → be consistent (see WP:ORDINALS)
- "number 23... number 45..." → be consistent with ordinal numbers (see above)
- "with it bringing total sales of nearly 8,000 shipments" → with its total shipments of nearly 8,000 units
- "The song as well impacted other European countries" → "impacted" sounds bizarre
- "number one, number three and number 26" → be consistent with ordinal numbers and serial comma
- "were majorly successful worldwide" → "majorly" sounds biased
- "I Am the Club Rocker Tour (2011-2012) and toured Europe and the Unites States" → the tour name should not be italicised + "United States" + I Am... Tour, which visited Europe and the United States
and made thousands of people sing along with her most of her songs → to me this is overfluous
More to come. — Simon (talk) 02:23, 1 June 2016 (UTC)
- @HĐ: Any chance you'll get to this soon? Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:58, 5 June 2016 (UTC)
- @Cartoon network freak: Here you go.
- Background
- "She's wearing a summer suit and sporting long boots and a French-like bun" → a summer suit, sporting long boots and a French-like bun. Also, what is "bun" in this case?
- "The album remains an europop, dance-pop, techno and house record" → remains? Are these Inna's signature styles? If so, please clarify.
- "and some other vocal effects" → vague, can be omitted
- Reception
- number 45, number eight... → be consistent (see WP:ORDINALS)
- "Furthermore, he as well" → "Furthermore, he..."
- "Furthermore, he criticized the use of Auto Tune" → repetition of "Furthermore", try using some other phrases
- Promotion
- Release dates for singles should be added
- This section only include one subsection "Singles", so I think you can omit the sub-section
- Again, be consistent with numbers (chart positions)
- "In just a few hours after the clip's premiere, it amassed nearly 6,000 likes" → this sounds, uhm, unencyclopedic
- Other than that, great job!
On hold for seven days. Simon (talk) 08:32, 16 June 2016 (UTC)
- @HĐ: Done everything! "bun" has to man an accesoire she wears, and I didn't include the dates for the singles, as they're already provided in the infobox + the singles have each an own article, where this can be further seen. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 11:58, 16 June 2016 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.