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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 03:36, 17 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry about the review time!

"Veronica has a dream of the dead bus crash students before she visits the guidance counselor" When did this happen? In a previous episode? If so, I'd recommend putting a "Background" subheading before the plot summary

Wait, which part? The dream takes place within the episode--the bus crash takes place in the season two premiere.

The bus crash. It happens out of the blue in the plot summary.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 01:36, 7 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"In science class, Logan gets paired with Wallace and Dick gets paired with Angie Dahl (Kayla Ewell)." That comes out of nowhere
would cut out all the science stuff from the three paragraphs and restructure them into their own new one. As its stands, the plot summary is really choppy

done Also, copyedited the section. I think it's a lot less choppy than The Rapes of Graff one, especially because this one is difficult to summarize. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)^{talk to me!}_{see my work} 23:30, 6 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I think it's fine seeing as it's a widely used source from known and vetted authors, especially because this is a list rather than a review, which is what BuzzFeed is known for.

Just a personal preference (that you totally don't have to do, but I think it makes the page easier to read): I'd seperate all of the reviews and then group them based on what they're saying. So TV.com and AV Club could go together, and Television Without a Pity and Alan Sepinwall could go together, etc.

done Flipped stuff around a bit--let me know how that looks. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)^{talk to me!}_{see my work} 23:30, 6 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"The Rapes of Graff" has two columns for its references, but this one only has one. Just a minor note

Just a few things.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 15:42, 6 September 2015 (UTC) @Gen. Quon: I fixed everything, I believe. Let me know if there's anything else I can do. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)^{talk to me!}_{see my work} 23:30, 6 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@BenLinus1214: If you can expand upon/clarify the bus crash bit, then this'll pass!--Gen. Quon (Talk) 01:37, 7 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@Gen. Quon: I don't think a background bit is necessary--I added a link to "Normal Is the Watchword", the season two premiere in which the crash occurred. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)^{talk to me!}_{see my work} 01:07, 11 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]