Talk:IPanda
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@Yiyunl347: Great topic and great article. I like the infobox and you've really done a good job of bringing this together. Nice set of references as well. I think this is good and it very clearly establishes notability. A few pieces of feedback:
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[edit]- The WP:LEDE suggests that this is just about the English version of the website. Is there a reason you would want different articles about the English and Chinese version of iPanda? It seems more natural to me that there would just be one article and that it would cover both. I would write this about the website in general and just link and describe the versions, and differences, in English, German, and Chinese.
- There are some language issues. Proofread this carefully and maybe ask for help. Other Wikipedians should be able to help with this too.
- It's pretty usual to have citations/references in the section headers. I think it's more normal to write sentences that sort of introduce the material in a heading and then include the citations/reference inline the text.
- You have at least one section that is empty. I would either fill this in or remove the sections until you're done with them.
- The last two sections on Section and Dispute and Other terminals are very rough. I would either expand these into more narrative text or just cut them until you're ready.
Otherwise, this looks ready to go. You've worked hard on this. It looks great! —mako๛ 23:11, 20 October 2016 (UTC)
- @Benjamin Mako Hill: Thanks very much for your feedback. I've made some changes based on it:
- I removed the "English version" tag. At first, I thought it would be better to separate different versions because the Chinese one contains much more content that the other two do not have. But considering the core of IPanda is always the live-streaming, I agree that it's more natural to just write it in general.
- I improved the language a little bit by myself and have added a copy edit template in the lead asking for help.
- Citation issue fixed
- For the 'Other terminal' section, I removed it and mentioned this in other section briefly. For 'Success and Dispute', I expanded them to short paragraphs. Hope it works!
Yiyunl347 (talk) 04:17, 22 October 2016 (UTC)
- Nice article! I've heard about panda viewing sites but never explored them or knew how they operated. Grammar is excellent, the lede, infobox, and entire article is neatly organized, informative, and has a nice encyclopedic tone. I just have a couple of notes. In the Documentaries of Panda's section, is there a way to find out more information about those documentaries, such as what kind of documentaries they are, and what stories they cover about the pandas specifically. Also in that same paragraph, it would help to describe the CCTV acronym as (China Central Television), like you did for CNTV in the lede. People might be confused and think it stands for Closed Circuit Television, like I did. Finally, you mention that only English websites get to see different stages of life of pandas, I would like to know what non-English sites see instead. Great job! - Eliasd06 (talk) 01:57, 29 October 2016 (UTC)
@Yiyunl347: Thanks for introducing IPanda to us Yiyun! I followed IPanda's Facebook account a few months ago but I didn't know that it is a 24-hour live streaming. I clicked into the website and found it really interesting. They are so adorable. Please see below regarding my thoughts about your article:
- I like your infobox and how you described the process of camera set in detail.
- I would like to see more information about request programs and documentaries of panda.
- I think one or two photos about panda's living environment captures or the camera sets would help us understand more about IPanda visually.
Well done!--YixuanLong (talk) 06:51, 29 October 2016 (UTC)
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Feedback
[edit]Gently recommending some changes to this article to match article standards:
- The external links should be examined to ensure they conform to WP:ELNO. For instance, do the non-English external links belong? Fan sites? Social media?
- Recommend translating the Chinese sources to English. If you use the {{citation}} template this can easily be done with the trans-title parameter.
- Recommend examining the extensive use of the subject's "about us" page. Look for secondary sources that establish the necessary facts.
Cheers - Brianhe (talk) 06:04, 29 October 2016 (UTC)