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The phrase "Apple did not disclose in advance what would be announced at the event" in the History section should be reformulated. Done
The sentence "The announcement of the iPad affected the tablet resale market, and Apple's stock price reached a record closing figure on the same day that the Dow Jones Index reached a closing figure of above 13,000 for the first time since the Global Financial Crisis, though it is not a Dow Jones component." in the same section contains the words "closing figure" twice and feels too long. The "though it is not a Dow Jones component" note should be separated from this sentence, as the meaning of "it" isn't obvious and forces the reader to reread the entire sentence. Done
The sentence "At the media event, Cook talked about a 'post-PC world', a world where the personal computer is no longer the center of one's digital life, and of how the 3rd generation iPad will be one of the main contributors of the 'post-PC world'." in the same section should be reformulated to avoid nested phrase in the middle. Eg. "At the media event Cook stated that the 3rd generation iPad will be one of the main contributors to the emerging 'post-PC world', a world where the personal computer is no longer the center of one's digital life." Done
The sentence "Many users have reported overheating with the 3rd generation iPad, especially after running 3D games." in the third paragraph of the Critical reception section is somehow wrong. It should be either "overheating of" or "overheating issues with", with the first solution being preferable in the context. Done
The sentence "Thermal imaging tests were conducted and revealed it has gotten as hot as 116 degrees Fahrenheit." in the same paragraph uses grammatically wrong combination of times. Done
The sentence "It will also be released on March 23, 2012 in [...]" (emphasis added) in the Commercial reception section refers to the past date. Done
The sentence "Demand for pre-orders were so high for the third generation iPad that later orders were quoted shipping times of "two to three weeks" after the order was placed." (emphasis added) is grammatically wrong. Done
Infobox lists several "Audio formats" without explaining the meaning of list. Whatever this list is supposed to mean, the information should be given in the article body in more detail. Furthermore, if those formats are those hardware accelerated, it should be explicitly stated; otherwise this information should be omitted from infobox. Done
In the first paragraph of Software the sentences feel disconnected and some duplicate the statements. The text should be reformulated to make reading easier. Done
In the same section the word iPad (specifically in phrase the new iPad) occurs too frequently. Some way around should be found. Done
The abbreviation "PST" in the History section is ambiguous for non-US readers. It should be replaced with "Pacific Standard Time", otherwise explained or removed entirely. Done
The Features and Hardware sections intersect both in their scope and coverage. They should probably be reorganized into a section with subsections. Done
The Hardware sections discusses the accessories that are not bundled with device. This subtopic probably should be covered under subsection of Hardware. Done
The article sticks with Citation Style 1, but doesn't adhere the work and publisher guidance. The choice of template is also questionable: {{cite web}} is used for press releases instead of {{cite press release}}. Wikilinking inside citation templates is inconsistent. Done
The text of the History section is sandwiched between the image and infobox. The image should be removed or (if absolutely needed, which is not the case IMHO) right-aligned to float under the infobox. Done
The lead section doesn't adequately summarize the article. It speculates about main usage patterns of just released iPad, which are nowhere else stated and sourced; it omits the software changes, which take ¼ of the article length. Actually it does.
Article suffers from overlinking. Generally each term is supposed to be linked in first occurrence in infobox, in first occurence in the lead section, once per reference (authors, works, publishers) and in first occurrence in the rest of article. Still App Store is linked twice, Apple is linked in Software while occurs first in History, etc. Done
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
The statements that are likely to be challenged are tagged accordingly. Done
The caption for File:IPad 3 Store Lines.jpg is too long. Though most text is appropriate, the "at an Apple Store in San Francisco" part should be removed, as it is pretty evident that the building is an Apple Store, and its location isn't important enough to occupy an entire line of caption. Done
Please refer to issue by numbers. Eg., the second issue with 1a criterion is 1a2.
1b1
For the record: this solution isn't the best one IMHO, but this way the ambiguity is solved. Though MOS demands abbreviations spelled in full on first occurrence, this one seems to be known widely enough. — Dmitrij D. Czarkoff (talk) 01:54, 31 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
1a4
I have reworded the phrase and removed the word overheating as I believe that word made the sentence a bit awkward to read even if the suggestions were to be substituted in - feel free to use the suggestions but it just sounds a bit weird to my ear. YuMaNuMaContrib11:08, 31 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Not actually. The sound capabilities of iPad are an important aspect. There were speculations on changes before the release and some sources claim sound-related improvements, sometimes contradicting each other. Definitely this topic should get coverage. Furthermore, I would expect the hardware capabilities of the device (eg. hardware audio and video encoding/decoding) covered, though in case of iPad it may be not as critical as in cases of Android tablets. — Dmitrij D. Czarkoff (talk) 08:41, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
