Talk:I've Just Seen a Face/GA1
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Reviewer: Zmbro (talk · contribs) 19:30, 13 August 2021 (UTC)
I'm super bored so why not. – zmbro (talk) 19:30, 13 August 2021 (UTC)
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Infobox and lead
[edit]- Image is fine, although since it was uploaded by the now-banned User:Shoot for the Stars, who had a long history of uploading irrelevant files, I'm wondering if we should even keep it...
- I've never really liked this one. I generally find 45 labels ugly in comparison with sheet music covers, and this one is not an exception with its decidedly silly cover. Sheet music is also generally what's used with other non-singles (cf. "If I Needed Someone" or any other track from Rubber Soul). I've gone ahead and swapped the images.
- Already made a few misc edits for ya to make things easy (I'm not gonna force you to change a link)
- Thanks, all looks good. "Lennon's window, Yoko Ono" sounds like the kind of wordplay a John Lennon impersonator would come up with.
- Haha I laughed when I saw that. – zmbro (talk) 19:06, 14 August 2021 (UTC)
- I would move the recording sentence to the first paragraph after Rubber Soul for flow
- Done.
- Could we add a sentence about critical reviews? I think one could replace the Martin orchestra sentence
- Added critical reviews.
Background and composition
[edit]- Add alt text to image
- Added.
- The first two paragraphs seem to have flow issues. It starts by making it appear that McCartney wrote it in response to Lennon writing more, then going on to say he wrote it as early as two years prior. I would restructure these a bit for chronological flow
- Agreed. I've moved things around a bit.
- "Begun as an" → "Beginning as an" or "Starting as an"
- Went with the former.
- Music section looks good
- Lyrics section looks good
Recording
[edit]- "Starr overdubbed maracas.[31] Harrison added" → "Starr overdubbed maracas,[31] while Harrison added"
- Done.
Release
[edit]- "performed in the film, Help!, and" → you can remove the title as it was already stated earlier in the section
- Done.
Reception
[edit]- Looks good
McCartney live versions
[edit]- Image needs alt text
- Done.
- "1975–1976 Wings Over the World tour" is used here but "1975–76 Wings Over the World tour" is used in the lead; choose one or the other
- Since 2011–12 On the Run tour, is used here, I'd change the above point to 1975–76
- Done.
Charles River Valley Boys version
[edit]- "Set list" → "setlist" I've already corrected a few but just make sure it's consistent throughout the article
- Fixed.
- "5600-person" → "5,600-person"?
- Done.
- "produced by Rothchild and co-produced by Peter K. Siegel" missing a word or two? or should the p be capital?
- Capitalized.
- "harmonization" → "harmonisation"
- Fixed.
- "emphasize" → "emphasise"
- Fixed.
Other versions
[edit]- Looks good
Personnel
[edit]- Looks good
Notes
[edit]- Looks good
References
[edit]- Ref 39 needs pp. not p.
- Fixed.
- Any other info on ref 54? author/date/archive?
- No author given. I added the date and an archive though.
- All book sources look good and complete
Final thoughts
[edit]- Another very well-written article. Should be a GA in no time. – zmbro (talk) 20:38, 13 August 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks again, zmbro!
- I realized I forgot to mention that the song is on Rockshow so I've added that and other info in. Tkbrett (✉) 15:36, 14 August 2021 (UTC)
- Fantastic. Happy to call this a ✓ Pass. – zmbro (talk) 19:10, 14 August 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks! Tkbrett (✉) 19:36, 14 August 2021 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.