Talk:Hutchinson letters affair/GA1
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 06:47, 11 January 2013 (UTC)
I will start this shortly--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 06:47, 11 January 2013 (UTC)
- Clarify that Wedderburn lambasted Franklin at the Board of Trade hearing. It's kind of implicit in your current phrasing, but let's make it more explicit.
- Not sure what's not explicit to how this is written: "In the hearing concerning Hutchinson's fate, in which the aftermath of the Boston Tea Party was also discussed, Franklin stood silently while he was lambasted by Solicitor General Alexander Wedderburn for his role in the affair."
- This is the prior sentence: The Massachusetts assembly and governor's council petitioned the Board of Trade for Hutchinson's removal. On my first reading I wasn't sure who was conducting the hearing during which Wedderburn insulted Franklin. I couldn't figure out why the Solicitor General would have anything to do with the Board of Trade.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:58, 12 January 2013 (UTC)
- I've noted that the Franklin meeting was of the Privy Council; is that sufficiently clear? (Not everyone knows that the Board of Trade was a subset of the Privy Council, but I don't think that difference needs to be brought up here.) Magic♪piano 00:11, 13 January 2013 (UTC)
- I agree.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:26, 13 January 2013 (UTC)
- I've noted that the Franklin meeting was of the Privy Council; is that sufficiently clear? (Not everyone knows that the Board of Trade was a subset of the Privy Council, but I don't think that difference needs to be brought up here.) Magic♪piano 00:11, 13 January 2013 (UTC)
- This is the prior sentence: The Massachusetts assembly and governor's council petitioned the Board of Trade for Hutchinson's removal. On my first reading I wasn't sure who was conducting the hearing during which Wedderburn insulted Franklin. I couldn't figure out why the Solicitor General would have anything to do with the Board of Trade.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:58, 12 January 2013 (UTC)
- Not sure what's not explicit to how this is written: "In the hearing concerning Hutchinson's fate, in which the aftermath of the Boston Tea Party was also discussed, Franklin stood silently while he was lambasted by Solicitor General Alexander Wedderburn for his role in the affair."
- This is awkaward He was accused of thievery and dishonor, called the prime mover in England on behalf of Boston's Committee of Correspondence. Done Magic♪piano 19:38, 12 January 2013 (UTC)
- Link postmaster general and general Done (although there is no general link for "postmaster general" other than a dab page) Magic♪piano 19:38, 12 January 2013 (UTC)
- Clarify the use of the PD-Art tag on File:Thomas Pownall.jpg Done Magic♪piano 19:38, 12 January 2013 (UTC)
- Need a US copyright tag for File:ThomasHutchinson.jpeg Done Magic♪piano 19:38, 12 January 2013 (UTC)
--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 08:43, 12 January 2013 (UTC)
- Thanks for taking the time to review this! Magic♪piano 19:38, 12 January 2013 (UTC)