Talk:Hurt (Christina Aguilera song)/GA2
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 20:32, 5 November 2013 (UTC)
Hi Jorn, I'll be glad to take this one; sorry you've had to wait so long for a review. For some reason we've had an extraordinary number of Aguilera songs nominated lately and it's caused us to get backed up. Comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. Thanks in advance for your work on it! -- Khazar2 (talk) 20:32, 5 November 2013 (UTC)
- "and the final version is a tribute to the pair's symbiotic teamwork" -- not neutral; should be attributed in-text to a critic
This appears to be fairly complete in its coverage, and I like the choice of images; thanks again for your work here. Unfortunately, I see that this was failed previously for copyediting issues, and while the specific example given were cleared up, many issues still remain. I suspect this may be part of reason why this remained in the queue for so long.
Check out just these few sentences:
- According to Perry, Aguilera's wanted to record a song about losing someone. She asked collaborator the producer to help in the development, and she developed it thinking aout her father, who had died less than a year before the song was written. Perry commented: "And she came to me, and had these two chords that her and this guy wrote, and she was like 'I really like these chords, can you turn this into a song? I want the song to be about losing someone'. And inside of me, I'm going 'You little fucking bitch, you totally know I lost my dad, and now you're gonna milk me my emotions'."::
An occasional error gets by all of us, but this doesn't seem to have been read very carefully before nomination. The "Aguilera's" doesn't make any sense, "asked collaborator the producer" doesn't make sense, "aout" is missing a letter, and "milk me my emotions" is either missing a word or has an extra one. Smaller problems with the phrasing persist throughout the article. If you're not comfortable doing this copyediting yourself, my recommendation is that you make a request at the Guild of Copy-Editors for help before renominating.
I do appreciate your work on this, and am sorry I can't pass it at this time. Good luck with your revisions on it! -- Khazar2 (talk) 20:48, 5 November 2013 (UTC)