Talk:Hurt (Christina Aguilera song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HĐ (talk · contribs) 15:43, 30 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

It was written by Aguilera, Linda Perry and Mark Ronson for Aguilera's fifth studio album, Back to Basics (2006). --> add the producer

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which was planned to be the second single --> the second one

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"Hurt" received positive reviews from music critics who praised Aguilera's voice and its production ---> add a comma after critics

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Commercially, it was a worldwide success, peaking within the top ten in Australia, Austria, Belgium and France... ---> Commercially, the single attained moderate success in the US, peaking at number... However, it was a top-ten hit worldwide, peaking...

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in several occasions, including a performance at the 2006 MTV Video Music Awards and on her 2006-07 Back to Basics Tour. --> on several occasions, including at the 2006 MTV VMA ...

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Still reviewing — HĐ (talk) 15:43, 30 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Background

However, record company RCA Records felt that with the holiday season coming up, it would be safer to release "Hurt", as it would become a big holiday power ballad, comparable to how Aguilera's "Beautiful" performed commercially back in the 2002 holidays. ---> However, the singer's recording label RCA Records felt that with the holiday season coming up, it would be safer to release "Hurt", as it would become a big holiday power ballad, comparable to how Aguilera's "Beautiful" performed commercially back in the 2002 holidays.

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Composition

Its slow melody is paced at 72 beats per minute and set in common time ---> ?

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Aguilera's voice range spans from G3 to E5 ---> I think "vocals" would be more suitable than "voice"

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Eric Gorfain., ---> remove the full stop

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The lyrics part is so... lame? (sorry, I don't have any words to describe it) Why are the lyrics sourced by the album notes? You should source them by MetroLyrics or something else?

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Critical reception

well received ---> well-received

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I don't think the quotebox is required here. Remove it

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Chart performance

Add RIAA certification

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has sold over 1.1 million digital copies so far ---> I don't think "so far" is needed

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a Gold certification 40,000 digital downloads ---> a Gold certification for 40,000 digital downloads

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and has spent ---> had spent

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year-end chart in 2006, Hurt peaked at number 150 ---> of 2006,... was the 150th best-selling single in the country

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has re-entered ---> remove "has"

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In Australia, "Hurt" entered the charts ---> chart

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The next week ---> The following week

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falling out ---> and fell out

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spending a total of 27 weeks in the chart ---> on the chart

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Belgium and France certifications are based on SALES, not SHIPMENTS, fix it

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Add the chart position for Swiss chart

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Swiss certification is based on unspecified figures, not shipments, fix it

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Music video

due to coldness ---> due to the coldness

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the ending instrumental to "Enter the Circus"/"Welcome" ---> of

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old fashioned ---> old-fashioned

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Live and covers

in her Back to Basics Tour ---> on

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Credits

Use n-dash instead of dash

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Release history

Add label

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Charts

Add !scope="row" for charts information

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Sources for charts need accessdate

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Sources

Several sources (example: MTV News, Rolling Stone, Billboard...) require brackets in their publisher. (Use {{Cite news}} instead of {{Cite web}})

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Reviewing

Status

On hold — HĐ (talk) 03:40, 3 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

— HĐ (talk) 15:55, 30 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Done all. Jorn ^talk 15:45, 6 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Second read through

Lead

It was written by Aguilera, Linda Perry and Mark Ronson, and produced by Perry for Aguilera's fifth studio album, Back to Basics (2006). ---> repetition of "Aguilera", try "her", "the latter" or "the singer"
It was released as the album's second single on September 19, 2006 by RCA Records instead of "Candyman", which was planned to be the second one. ---> repetition of "it", try "the song" or "the track"
Perry developed the first draft of the song while Aguilera rewrote some of the lyrics, and the final version is a tribute to the pair's symbiotic teamwork ---> this is sourced by About.com, which is NOT so reliable
Aguilera's voice ---> vocals
attained a moderate success ---> success is countable lol?
however, it was certified gold by the Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA), having sold more than 1.1 million copies in the country alone, according to Nielsen SoundScan. ---> don't require "however"
directed by Floria Sigismondi and Aguilera herself in September 2006. ---> I think Aguilera is just a co-director here
It was well-received, ---> reduce the comma

Background

On the second disc and her work with Perry on it, Aguilera stated ---> about, not on
originated of ---> ?

Sources

Several sources which have problems:

FN4: About.com doesn't require brackets in its publisher
FN5: What is Mansized? Try to find sources are reliable, like I did on "Candyman (Christina Aguilera song)"
FN9: MetroLyrics requires publisher
FN18: CBS News requires publisher
FN21: IGN requires publisher
FN25: cite news
FN55: work?
FN56: publisher?
Sources for charts in "Chart performance" and "Charts" must be as the same.
Sources for "Amazon.com" needs publisher as "Amazon Inc"

— HĐ (talk) 02:33, 17 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Status

Failing, as too many mistakes. Sorry but the article is not ready for GA yet. — HĐ (talk) 02:33, 17 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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