Talk:Hurricane Winifred/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk) 03:38, 17 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Why is there no caption under the picture of Winifred?
- Added.
"caused more than $5 million (1992 USD), $8 million (2010 USD) in damage." - Add an inflation template in the same parenthesis as 1992 USD, and then erase $8 million (2010 USD).
- Fixed.
"It gradually headed west-northwestward, slowly organized, and developed and concentrated convection." - I think you are missing the word deep between developed and concentrated.
The Meteorological history is rather short, it can be expanded using information from here.
- What exactly is mising from it?
  - Well, just looking at the first three discussions, it seems that they were way off on the intensity predictions (btw, I messed up when I put that link on). So you are missing a lot of info on NHC's operational predictions. In addition, later discussions, like #6, predicted only light intensification, shortly before rapid intensification occurred. Furthermore, there should it should also be noted that it was operationally seemed that Winifred peaked as only a high-end Category 2 hurricane, rather than a Category 3 (highest operationally recorded wind speed is in Discussion #12. Some discussions shortly before landfall also showed Winifred surviving over land in Mexico until as late as October 12, but the storm ended up dissipating less than 24 hours after landfall. I could go on and on about this, so in basic summary: you are missing NHC's operational data and the significant inaccuracy of intensity predictions.--12george1 (talk) 04:57, 18 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Manzanillo, Colima" is linked too many times; delink all but where it is wikilinked in the lead.
"On 0300 UTC Ocotber 9" - first of all, there is a typo here. Second, reword to "On October 9 at 0300 UTC", it will read better and makes more sense.
None of the words in tropical storm warning should be capitalized.
- Fixed.
In the same sentence, you are missing a period at the end.
There has to be more impact out there, like on Google News.
- I checked google news and found only one minor detail that was missing. The others were either the Earthweek column or were duplications of the Calgary Heral source.
Reference #4 is on a separate line, delete the space between the period (once you add it) and the ref tag.
"Starting on October 8,[1]" - I hate when people do this; it seems like you are citing that "Starting on October 8", instead of what it is intended to cite; move the reference to the end of that sentence.
Why do you have American units first and then metric unit in parenthesis in the MH, but vice-versa here?
- Fixed.
"Waves 4 m (4.4 yd) forced the closure of" - metres are always converted to feet, not yards.
"damage in his state was 16000 pesos (1992 MXP)." - What is 16000 pesos in United States dollar?
In the references, National Hurricane Center is wikilinked every time; obviously you can't fix it on reference #2,
- It's linked every time for reasons of consistency. Miss Madeline | Talk to Madeline 23:33, 17 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I am putting this review on hold so that the above improvements can either be fixed or addressed.--12george1 (talk) 03:38, 17 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I wrote a tad of article (it was in my userspace), and I think the article can be expanded slightly by inclduing discussions from the NHC and from Google's' newspaper archive. Y E ^Tropical ^Cyclone

With no effort at all for 7 days to fix my issue with the shortness of the Meteorological History, I have no choice but to fail this GA nomination.--12george1 (talk) 03:05, 24 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]