Talk:Hurricane Willa/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: JavaHurricane (talk · contribs) 11:44, 23 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will do. -- Java Hurricane 11:44, 23 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

I have disambiguated a few links. I don't think any others exist, but please check if any remain.
"Though the system subsequently crossed over Central America into the East Pacific, without significant organization." - Should be "However, ...".

Changed. Noah^Talk 14:02, 23 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"Later in the day, the system became a tropical storm as it began to rapidly intensify. Willa became a Category 4 major hurricane on October 21, before strengthening further to Category 5 intensity on the next day." We could do with better sentence construction.

Better? Noah^Talk 14:02, 23 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

MH is top class, no problems there.
"Mexican Secretariat of the Navy" - is the person's name available?

Added the guy's name.. would have been the one under the old president. Noah^Talk 14:02, 23 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"In Mazatlán, rockslides and flooding of the Camarón lagoon occurred." Bad sentence construction, could be improved.

Better? Noah^Talk 14:03, 23 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"Acaponeta was similarly severely impacted as record-breaking flooding occurred along the Acaponeta River, [...]" - any sources about "record-reaking"?

"They calculate a flow of 17 thousand cubic meters, an unprecedented figure in the Nayarite records." this is what the source says for that. Noah^Talk 14:02, 23 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"There, approximately 1,820 people were provided with 1,400 food rations." Where is "there"?

Clarified that that was Sinaloa. Noah^Talk 14:02, 23 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, a good read! I have no hesitation in passing this, but till the above issues are fixed, I'll keep this On hold. Cheers! -- Java Hurricane 13:24, 23 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

All problems are now fixed. Passed for GA. On a side note, I think we could start preparing for a possible FAC from now on. The MH is top-notch, and the preparations and aftermath are also very nicely written. A little bit of copyediting and we could get Willa to FA-class. -- Java Hurricane 14:11, 23 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]