Talk:Hurricane Roslyn (1986)/GA1

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Reviewer: Leave Message, Yellow Evan home 19:43, 8 May 2010 (UTC) In all great article. However, I have some comments.[reply]

Lead

Should be a little longer, mention when it became a tropical storm and hurricane.

MH

"With warm waters and increasing cyclonic organization, it developed into Tropical Depression 24 on October 15 offshore Guatemala." Spell out 24.
"By 48 hours after attaining hurricane status, Roslyn reached peak winds of 145 mph (230 km/h), about 550 miles (890 km) southwest of Manzanillo, Colima;"Reword the first part of the sentence
"After bypassing southeast of the Baja California Peninsula, Hurricane Roslyn moved ashore on October 22 at Mazatlán, Sinaloa with winds of 75 mph (120 km/h)."Ashore should be onshore

Impact

Rename section, as you did Easy 50.
"Storm impact was limited to flooded homes and factories, as well as some crop damage and beach erosion."Remove the storm part.

I am placing the article on hold for now.

Thanks, did everything but "ashore" vs. "onshore" (I think both are correct, but I prefer the former). --Hurricanehink (talk) 20:40, 8 May 2010 (UTC)\[reply]

Ok, I am passing this article. Leave Message, Yellow Evan home