Talk:Hurricane Richard/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 21:20, 20 October 2012 (UTC) Will review. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:20, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"The storm slowly organized, and the National Hurricane Center declared it a tropical storm, giving it the name Richard on later that day." Remove this there is too much detail in the lead IMO. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:20, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done - Replaced with shorter sentence but retaining the fact it intensified into a TS. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:06, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"Over land, Richard quickly weakened, and after turning to the northwest, the storm was only briefly over the Bay of Campeche before degenerating into a remnant low." remove this sentence. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:20, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done - Kept it, but removed the whole Bay of Campeche part. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:06, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Mention when it dissipated in the lead. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:20, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done - Added October 25 in there. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:06, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Why is there a source in the lead? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:20, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done - Removed it. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:06, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

" On October 16, the National Hurricane Center began to monitor that area of disturbed weather in association with a weak trough of low pressure over the southwestern Caribbean Sea, which persisted across the region as Hurricane Paula dissipated over Cuba on the same day.[3] By October 17, the easterly and northerly trade winds flowed into the low, producing a disorganized area of convection, or thunderstorms across the region.[4] For several days the system moved generally west-northwestward toward Central America. Convection increased over the low on October 18, and the National Hurricane Center (NHC) noted the possibility of further organization due to favorable environmental conditions.[5] Later that day it passed near the eastern coast of Nicaragua,[6]" you need to do some swamping here. The National Hurricane Center should be lined on it's first usage, and on it's second usage it should not be linked. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:20, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done - Don't need the long paragraph :P. Swa"m"pped the linking. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:06, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"Later that day it passed near the eastern coast of Nicaragua,[6] and it became more organized as it turned to a north-northwest drift in the northwestern Caribbean Sea.[7]" two things comma after day and I'd break up the sentence into two. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:20, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done - Revised as specified. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:06, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

" As such, the NHC noted that "any increase in the organization of the associated showers and thunderstorms [would] lead to the formation of a tropical depression." remove as it is IMO not needed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:20, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done - Replaced with a sentence that the NHC noted that it was close to TD strength, without the quote. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:06, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"The wind shear decreased, and despite the presence of dry air to its northwest, the depression intensified to Tropical Storm Richard by 1500 UTC on October 21, based on confirmation from the Hurricane Hunters.[12]" not backed up by TCR (I know it is sourced by the disco). Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane

Done - What's a disco? Just kidding, but added post-op sentence. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:21, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

""not out of question if Richard develops the right inner core structure" removed per WP:NOT. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:20, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done - Please specify WP:NOT policy, but removed nonetheless. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:06, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

You should mention it was operationally a Cat 1 at landfall. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:20, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done - Added into MH. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:06, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"Starting late on October 21, the Government of Honduras issued a tropical storm watch for then-Tropical Storm Richard, which covered the north coast of Honduras from Limón to the border with Nicaragua.[27] " wikilink to tropical cyclone warnings and watches for "tropical storm watch". Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:20, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done - Linked and a go. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:06, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"In addition mudslides triggered by rainfall cut off an estimated 15,000 people in 40 small towns.[32][33]" comma after addition. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:20, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done - Brought in the comma head. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)}`

"since the storm made landfall to the south-southeast of Belize City as a lower-end category 2 hurricane.[22]" remove as it is redundant to the MH. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:20, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done - Squashed the entire sentence into bits with my mortar and pestle. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:21, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"The entire grapefruit harvest was lost, an estimated 25% of orange crops were lost, and several large trees were downed. In addition, about 200 homes were destroyed.[40] [1]" no space between the refs. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:20, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done - Space removed, time stopped, laws of physics shut down. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:06, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"Even though at least tropical storm conditions were possible in Guatemala,[29] there were no tropical storm watches or warnings issued in association with Richard" remove, not relevant. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:20, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done - Its irrelevancy has been removed. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:21, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Any more impact? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane

Done - Not too much other than rehashes of the already stated information. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:21, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Dump all of these links in the See also:

2010 Atlantic hurricane season List of tropical cyclone names Hurricane Iris Tropical Storm Harvey (2011) Hurricane Dean Hurricane Hattie Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:20, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done - Dumped. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:06, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]