Talk:Hurricane Norma (1981)/GA1
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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk) 03:32, 10 May 2011 (UTC)
- A few of the issues from the "Todo" section of the talk page have not been resolved, they are:
- "'Early on October 8, a tropical depression had developed' - few problems. Where did the depression come from? Where did it form? And most importantly (grammar wise), why 'had developed'? The usage of past-perfect tense is awkward, not to mention redundant"
- I addressed this a long time ago.
- "'Torrential rains caused serious flooding north of Mazatlan.[4] In addition, Mazatlan was flooded as well as ten nearby towns.' - again, sorta awkward writing. Mazatlan is mentioned twice in four words, and the two sentences essentially cover the same piece of info (the rains caused flooding)"
- I knew there was one issue I had not addressed. Well, I think I've addressed this now.
- "'Agriculture was disrupted, and cattle were killed. Norma caused at least $24 million (1981 USD) dollars in crop damage and [1] the highest Mexican rainfall was 10.9 in (280 mm) in Plomosas/Rosario, Mexico' - you could've organized that better. The former sentence is very stubby, and could use more content, but the second sentence is very bloated with two disconnected pieces of info. Also, try and find a link for the area w/ the highest rain"
- Um, the area is Plomosas/Rosario, Mexico. I re-organized this a while ago inf I re-call correctly.
- You are still missing that day that Norma intensified into a tropical storm.
- Fixed,
- "'By midday on October 9 the winds had reached 50 mph (85 km/h) and on 1800 UTC October 9, the storm was upgraded into a hurricane."' - the midday on October 9 part is extraneous, since we already know it is continuing to intensify. The 50 mph means nothing"
- "'Early on October 8, a tropical depression had developed' - few problems. Where did the depression come from? Where did it form? And most importantly (grammar wise), why 'had developed'? The usage of past-perfect tense is awkward, not to mention redundant"
- Removed the continuing to intensify part
- "'This prompted evacuations of 5,000 people, and limited the death toll of Hurricane Norma to one person, a fisherman drowned when his boat capsized in the storm.' - so did Lidia being in the region prompt the evacuations? Why are Lidia's damage/deaths mentioned at all?"
- I have several other issues:
- Could you possibly get an image for the infobox, there is an image on Norma in the MWR. In fact, there is an image available for every tropical cyclone in the 1981 PHS, yet only Beatriz has one.
- No, as I don't upload images on Wikipedia, because of potential WP:C violation. However, ill ask someone on Wikipedia to upload the image.
- Actually, I will take the liberty to upload an image of Norma. BTW, those images in the MWR are part of NOAA, so they are in the public domain.--12george1 (talk) 00:12, 14 May 2011 (UTC)
- No, as I don't upload images on Wikipedia, because of potential WP:C violation. However, ill ask someone on Wikipedia to upload the image.
- The lede should be likely more in-depth about the impact, like for example, there should be a reason as to why "Norma caused $24 million in crop damage and one death in Mexico."
- Could you possibly get an image for the infobox, there is an image on Norma in the MWR. In fact, there is an image available for every tropical cyclone in the 1981 PHS, yet only Beatriz has one.
- Expanded.
- Missing inflation templates, I know about this discussion, but all of these money figures have changed significantly (even $25,000). For example, the total damage from Norma was $74 million in 1981, but in 2011, it would be $178.3 million.
- Ill keep it out untill further consensus to b eon the safe side.
- "well-defined eye became visible by via satellite imagery." - Erase either the word "by" or "via".
Done
- "The heavy rainfall caused two rives" - missing the letter 'r' in "rivers".
- Done
- In the references, Ft. Worth is misspelled (ref. #6).
- Fixed
- In references #4 and #8, the author should be "United Press International"; likewise, the author of reference #7 and #12 should be Associated Press.
- Fixed those you mentioed a few more refs, that had no authors as well. YE Tropical Cyclone 23:44, 12 May 2011 (UTC)
- Ok, I guess this article is good enough to pass. Congratulations,--12george1 (talk) 20:54, 16 May 2011 (UTC)
- Fixed those you mentioed a few more refs, that had no authors as well. YE Tropical Cyclone 23:44, 12 May 2011 (UTC)
- Missing inflation templates, I know about this discussion, but all of these money figures have changed significantly (even $25,000). For example, the total damage from Norma was $74 million in 1981, but in 2011, it would be $178.3 million.
