Talk:Hurricane Lester (1992)/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk) 03:46, 18 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The opening sentence should probably have a reference, like East Pacific HURDAT.
It is projec tpolicy not to put ref sin the lead as there is no need.
"Not long after entering Arizona, it dissipated on August 24 over New Mexico." - What is this? It would be much better if you said something like this: "Not long after entering Arizona, Lester weakened to a tropical depression, and dissipated on August 24 over New Mexico."
Incorporated your suggestion
Why is $3 million converted to 2006 USD and not 2011 USD?
Done
"and was responsible for 3 fatalities." - 3 should be spelled-out.
"moderate rainfall and minor flooding across southern California, Arizona and New Mexico, as well as rare August snow in the Rocky Mountains." - So there wasn't flooding in other states? The article later states that there was moderate flooding in Denver (Colorado).
Done
"The depression attained tropical storm status late on August 20, upon which it was named Lester." Reword; it sounds like your implying that August 20 was named Lester.
Done
"minimum central pressure of 985 mbar (hPa)." - Convert mbar to inHg, like this: 985 mbar (hPa; 29.09 inHg).
Fixed
"It degenerated into a tropical storm while crossing the Baja California Peninsula, and after passing through the northern Gulf of California it made a second landfall near Isla Tiburon in the state of Sonora." - This is kind of a run-on sentence; I would split those two sentences at "Baja California Peninsula, and after"; in other words, re-write as "It degenerated into a tropical storm while crossing the Baja California Peninsula." "After passing through the northern Gulf of California, it made a second landfall near Isla Tiburon in the state of Sonora."
Fixed.
How come I see it written as the "Government of Mexico" and then the "government of Mexico"?
Fixed.
Although the peak rainfall in the United States was mentioned, there is still nothing about the peak rainfall in Mexico.
Added.
All of the references have specific dates, but it is only written with the year in the article. The specific date of the preliminary report is on page 3.
The author of Reference #1, 7, and 9 should be Edward Rappaport, and the "National Hurricane Center" should be switched to the publisher parameter.
Done
Add the first names on Reference #2 and 3.
Done Y E ^Tropical ^Cyclone 15:36, 19 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
On Reference 10 & 11, the author should be Associated Press.

Thanks for the review. Y E ^Tropical ^Cyclone 15:36, 19 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, that is good enough, I will now be passing this article. Congratulations,--12george1 (talk) 16:40, 21 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]