Talk:Hurricane King/GA1

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Reviewer: Y E ^Tropical ^Cyclone 00:24, 1 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Happy New Year. This is a great article, but I have a few comments.

"Hurricane King was the severest hurricane to strike Florida since the 1926 Miami hurricane."severest" should be changed to "worst" IMO.
- But that is the wording that the weather bureau says. Saying "worst" doesn't mean anything. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 06:22, 1 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"The cyclone formed in the western Caribbean Sea on October 13, and initially moved northeastward, slowly strengthening." When did King become a hurricane?
- I don't think it's that important for the lede. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 06:22, 1 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"It was subsequently determined that the depression had already attained tropical storm status by October 13" no need for "subsequently" IMO.
- Agreed. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 06:22, 1 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"According to the Atlantic hurricane database, Easy intensified further over land to winds of 120 mph (195 km/h);[1] however, Hurricane Hunters indicated maximum winds of only 100 to 105 mph (160 to 165 km/h) by the time the hurricane emerged into the Florida Straits"
- Fixed mention of Easy. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 06:22, 1 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Hurricane King made landfall on downtown Miami, Florida" remove "hurricane"
- May I ask why? Saying just "King" so many times gets old IMO. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 06:22, 1 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"As the structure deteriorated, the winds diminished along the southern and western side of the storm, although winds gusted to hurricane force in many locations in eastern coastal Florida" "structure" sounds like a building was destroyed,so if I where you, i'd change it to "storm"
- I just removed it. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 06:22, 1 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Losses to the citrus crop were considered better than initially anticipated,[10] and overall, the citrus crop damage totaled about $3 million,[7] with 2.5 million boxes destroyed.[11]" You might want to split that sentence into two.
- Good call. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 06:22, 1 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Intense rainbands spread across the state's eastern coastline" wikilink to rainband
- fixed that myself
"Two of them - a woman in West Hollywood and a man in Hallendale - were killed when their houses collapsed from the strong winds." remove redlink please
- Why? What's wrong with redlinks? ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 06:22, 1 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Throughout the United States, Hurricane King caused 11 deaths and $30 million in damage (1950 USD). The hurricane also caused 199 injuries, of which 16 were severe." Should go elsewhere IMO as the damage is for all of the US, right.
- Yea, the section is "Elsewhere in the United States", so a country summary is appropriate there. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 06:22, 1 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Since you gave you fixed all of these or providing a reason why the sentence should not be changed, I am going to pass this article. Y E ^Tropical ^Cyclone 07:12, 1 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]