Talk:Hurricane Kathleen/GA1

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Reviewer: MathewTownsend (talk · contribs) 14:54, 9 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Should it be: "a tropical depression formed, named Kathleen"? - point at which storm was named.
- When it became a tropical storm, it was named Kathleen, but the naming itself is not important enough for the lead. It flows better without mentioning this. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:49, 9 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"recurve" - could this be briefly explained without the reader having to read and understand the linked article?
- Yea, but I might have made it worse. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:49, 9 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"These troughs" - starts two sentences in a row
- Fixed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:49, 9 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"weakened only slowly" - clumpsy wording
- Removed "only". Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:51, 9 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"eye" - a hurricane doesn't have to develop an eye?
- No. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:51, 9 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Kathleen weakened only slowly over California. Tropical Storm Kathleen weakened " - repeated wording
How so? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:02, 9 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Kathleen made its second landfall" - I'm not clear where the first one was
- Clarified. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:02, 9 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Finally, the center became difficult to locate" - so a hurricane can have a center, but not an eye?
- Yea. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:02, 9 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

common words like "cotton", "lettuce" and "hay" shouldn't be linked.
why is "one and 160 year event." linked to 100-year flood?
- The article gives the basic principle of how the 1 in 100 year flood thing works. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:02, 9 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Total damage was $160 million, making Kathleen one of the costliest tropical storms in state history" - is this still true in 2012?
yea. Have no source to back up, but according to my records, Kathleen is 2nd. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane
"flash flood watches were issued throughout Southern California, including the desert and mountains.[17] Flash flood warnings were also issued for parts of the state," - needs rewording as "parts of the state" is vague after previously specifying "Southern California".
Reworded slightly. Any better? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:02, 9 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
why are some states linked and not others?
- Good call. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:02, 9 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I made some copy edits so please revert any errors.[1]

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