Talk:Hurricane Isbell/GA1

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 17:56, 11 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The first sentence could be jazzier. Perhaps something like "was the final hurricane to affect the United States during the 1964 season" or something?
"The eleventh nameable storm" - eh, you could just say the 11th TS
" diffused frontal trough" - this is probably too advanced for the lead, and for the layman. You could just say "dissipating cold front"
"the storm began to weaken and fell Category 1 hurricane" - I would say the grammar needs to be fixed, but instead, I'll say that the exact category isn't needed here (the SSHS wasn't invented yet), so just a general weakening trend is fine.
"Several tornadoes in Florida caused significant damage overall." - why is the "overall" here? It seems superfluous, but perhaps it isn't
Generally, I try and include all damage totals in the lead that would show up in the infobox. You say $10 million in damage in the US, so I'm assuming $20 million in Cuba. That's worth saying, especially as the Cuban total is more than US.
"it is analyzed to have become a tropical depression by 12:00 UTC (8:00 a.m. EDT)" - when? On the 7th? The infobox says the 8th, the MH only mentions the 7th previously, so you should say which date, especially due to the subsequent sentence.
Why do you include the EDT? Most other articles don't do that.
"with radar imagery indicating little to no reflectivity along the backside of the storm." - what does that mean? I think I know, but if I'm not sure, the layman sure isn't.
Any reason in particular that you have the watches and warnings section? Most articles don't, I'm just curious.
"The aviation severe weather forecast also notified people that within an area south and east of a line from 60 mi (97 km) southwest of Miami north to Gainesville, as well as to 40 mi (64 km) north of Daytona Beach" - o.O - why so complicated? Why not say "also notified residents in south and central Florida"
"In the afternoon, they completed office preparations and scheduling, they also checked equipment." - this seems clunky
"with more than half of which was attributed to agricultural losses." - clunky
"Residents in nearby Lee Cypress, stated that the effects" - is Lee Cypress a town? Why the comma

All in all, a good read! Good job User:TheAustinMan, User:Cyclonebiskit, and User:12george1. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 17:56, 11 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I believe that I have fixed all of these issues now--12george1 (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]