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Reviewer: Hurricanefan25 (talk · contribs) 21:58, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
- "was one of three named tropical cyclone's to develop in the Central Pacific Hurricane Center's area of responsibility." - uninteresting lede sentence, and it implies that it was one of three of all time, not just that year
- Can't find a better one, but reworded. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:11, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
- "It formed on October 24." - too short, and add a bit - just a bit - about the monsoon trough there, along with the formation
- "Initially poorly organized, it moved to the north." - Maybe "Initially, Huko maintained poor organization as it moved to the north"
- Did not incorporate your suggestion as it changed the meaning, but re-worded. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:11, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
- "However, since Tropical Storm Lowell was less than 900 mi (1,400 km) east of Huko, combined with brief increase in wind shear caused by an" - remove "since" and add "and" before combined; any Fujiwhara effect?
- "Date Line" - add "International" and link
- Did #1, but did not to #2 per WP:OVERLINKING. YE Pacific Hurricane
- Please format the dates the same way in the refs
- If possible, add publishers to the citations
- There's a few minor problems with word choice, but they aren't a big deal
- Thanks for the review. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:11, 29 October 2011 (UTC)