Talk:Hurricane Gordon (2000)/GA1

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Reviewer: TheAustinMan (talk · contribs) 18:05, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hello George! I will be reviewing this article. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 18:05, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Make sure your uses of "Yucatan" in the lead have an accented a → "Yucatán"
Link frontal boundary to weather front.
"Gordon brought moderately storm surge..." → "Gordon brought moderate storm surge..."
"Overall, Gordon caused $10.8 million (2000 USD)^{[nb 1]}..." → "Overall, Gordon caused $10.8 million (2000 USD)^{[nb 1]} in damages..."

Fixed all of the above--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Meteorological history

In the picture of TD 11's wind radii, should it be "wind radius" in the caption or "wind field," since there are multiple contoured areas.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I would link 'computer model' to something suitable, like computer model or numerical weather prediction.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"The developing system moved slowly northwestward across the northern Yucatán Peninsula. Later that day, the depression moved inland over the Yucatán Peninsula." So... the depression crossed the peninsula twice?

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"...though a few computer models forecast for the depression..." forecast → forecasted

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"...forecast track was sifted further east..." I think you mean shifted.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Link extratropical cyclone.

Done--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

There's a neat radar image in the MH, but which one is Gordon? The mass of rain over Florida or the organized cluster of storms over South Carolina? If it was the one over SC, then the caption could say 'Extratropical remnants of Gordon...' If it was the one over Florida, perhaps you could try cropping the image?

Gordon could have been both pieces, since it fell apart rather quickly after moving inland.--12george1 (talk) 20:08, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Preparations

"The Florida Division of Emergency Management in Tallahassee made a mandatory evacuation in Hernando County," I think instead of 'made' you should say 'issued an order for a...' since you don't 'make' evacuations.

You're right, I don't "make" evacuations, but Chuck Norris does. lol Fixed--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"...while voluntary evacuations are called for..." → "...while voluntary evacuations were called for..."

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"The Chevron Corporation..." I think you don't need 'the' or 'corporation' in this case, since you mentioned it earlier.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Carnival's Sensation..." → "Carnival Sensation..."

Fixed, and link, even though you didn't ask--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Impact

Link C-MAN to Coastal-Marine Automated Network.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

You could link "Tampa metropolitan area" to Tampa Bay Area.

I guess I could, but I did!--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Link Coquina Beach.

No, that article is for the beach in North Carolina, not Florida--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"... and twenty-four nearby homes." What's with the sudden use of word form?

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"...with spotter reports and radar estimates indicating over 8 inches (200 mm) in Georgetown." I know you mention heavy rainfall earlier in the sentence, but I think it would be useful to indicate '8 inches (200 mm) of rain.'

It says "heavy rainfall to South Carolina" earlier in the sentence--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"...while according newspaper accounts," You're missing the word 'to.'

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"...standing water in excess of 2–3 feet (0.61–0.91 m) in many areas." You say excess, but then you provide a range with a maximum limit. Was it in excess of that range, or did standing water only fall in that range?

It was in excess of that range--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Is there anything from Virginia other than rain totals and a few high water and overflow reports?

Well, Gordon was a weak system by then, so there wouldn't be much else other than rainfall, which wasn't particularly heavy.--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"In Delaware, precipitation totals at Newark and New Castle Airport reached 1.82 inches (46 mm), respectively." You provide one value and say respectively. Alternatively, you could say "...totals at Newark and New Castle Airport both reached..."

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 20:26, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

External links

Every external link with the exception of "NHC (NOAA) Gordon," "Sky Chaser.com," "Hurricane Gordon Report," and "Hurricane Gordon" is a dead link. You could fix that.

I could, but I won't. JK--12george1 (talk) 20:35, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Disambiguations

Dablinks found the following disambiguations on the article:

I fixed--12george1 (talk) 20:35, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

That should be it for now. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 18:05, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Everything should be good now, except for a few places above.--12george1 (talk) 20:35, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Looks like my comments have been fixed, and where things were not changed reasons were justifiable. Great work, will pass! TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 21:43, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]