Talk:Hurricane Dora (1999)/GA1

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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contribs) 19:42, 9 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Thereafter, Dora began heading in a steadily westward" - Missing a word and we can axe the comma after.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Under warm sea surface temperatures and low wind shear," - Not to get technical, but the physical manifestation of a cyclone is above the water, not under it. :) Let's just go with "amid" or something similar.

Ok--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Thereafter, Dora fluctuated significantly in intensity due to shifts in the variability of atmospheric conditions" - What variability of atmospheric conditions? Some combo of shear or dry air or cooler waters? Just state that instead.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"with the storm ranging from peak intensity as a Category 4 hurricane to a low-end Category 1 hurricane." - Over what timeframe?

I'm going to say about four days. Dora was a Category 4 on August 12, was a Category 1 by August 14, and briefly became a major hurricane again on August 16--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"By August 4, the system entered the Pacific Ocean, accompanied by disorganized convection." - Link or describe convection.

Linked convection--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Three hours later, the National Hurricane Center (NHC) began issuing advisories on the depression and forecasted significant intensification." - Technically, the NHC initiated advisories when TD Seven-E formed. The difference in times is just the difference between operational and post season documenting. I'd axe this sentence.

Done--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Upon becoming a tropical storm, the NHC noted "there would seem to be no reason why Dora should not strengthen", citing decent outflow on the western side of the storm and ocean temperatures of nearly 84 °F (29 °C)" - I don't think forecasting strengthening is particularly noteworthy. Axe this.

Done--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Although the center began difficult to locate on satellite imagery on August 7, Dvorak T-numbers did not indicate a decrease in intensity." - This too, and re-link Dvorak in the next sentence.

Done--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Thus, it was predicted that Dora would soon reach Category 3 intensity." - Axe this too.

Done--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"In a forecast discussion by the NHC nine hours later, it was noted that a mid-troposhperic ridge would track eastward, thus causing Dora to move in a west-northwestward motion.[9] However, the hurricane instead continued westward or slightly north of due west" - West-northwest versus just north of west is not really a big distinction. I'd axe the first sentence (and reword the next accordingly).

Done--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Late on August 10, deep convection significantly expanded and became more symmetric, while Dvorak intensity estimates indicated that Dora reached Category 4 intensity." - But Dvorak estimates aren't official. Did NHC upgrade it?

Yes--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"A predicted weakening trend led the NHC to note that Dora was probably near peak intensity.[10] However, early on August 11, the NHC noted that the hurricane might weaken slow than forecast, as it was expected to remain in an environment of warm sea surface temperatures and light wind shear for the next three days.[11]" - Axe. Slice and dice. Chop.
"Later on August 11, the NHC predicted somewhat slow weakening beginning in about 24 hours" - Can we reword this? Somewhat slow weakening sounds quirky.

Better?--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Early on August 14, the duty of hurricane advisories was transferred from the NHC to the Central Pacific Hurricane Center (CPHC),[15] as the storm had crossed 180°N" - 180N is not a thing.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"By then, the system was weakening significantly and fall to Category 2 intensity around 06:00 UTC." - Fall to fell.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"The cyclone had maintained major hurricane status from 00:00 UTC on October 10 to 06:00 UTC on October 14 – more than 96 hours." - Not particularly important.

Better?--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"During a reconnaissance aircraft flight into the hurricane on August 16, a dropsonde recorded maximum sustained winds of 138 mph (222 km/h) at the 982 mbar (29.0 inHg) level." - But I'm not sure exactly what this means in terms of the storm's strength. The reference specifically notes satellite imagery as strong evidence for Cat 3. Maybe reword to something like "The combination of reconnaissance data and satellite imagery supported an upgrade of the storm back to Category 3 intensity..." or something like that.

Done--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"At 06:00 UTC, the storm intensified into a Category 3 hurricane with winds of 115 mph (185 km/h), while passing about 200 mi (320 km) south of the island of Hawaii – Dora's closest approach to the state of Hawaii." - Axe the comma after the winds and axe the "of Hawaii" at the end of the sentence since you mentioned Hawaii once already.

Done--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"The secondary peak intensity was brief, as weakening occurred after the forward speed increased." - This sentence implies the storm weakened because it sped up. Is that backed up by anything? If not, reword.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Dora passed 65 mi (105 km) south of Johnston Island on August 18, before turning west-northwestward." - No comma. Also, that's very exact. Let's throw an "about" or "roughly" or some other quantifier in there.

Done--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Around 00:00 UTC on the following day, Dora weakened to a tropical storm as it crossed the International Date Line as a 70 mph (115 km/h)." - A 70 mph what?! Don't leave me in suspense.

It would probably be better if I just axe the winds.--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"As the result, the storm became the first tropical cyclone since John in 1994 to have existed in all three north Pacific basins." - As the result --> As a result.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Hurricane Dora also produced rough surf on Johnston Atoll, with one forecaster remarking the surf was the most severe aspect of the storm." - Not important.

Removed--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"The automatic station at Johnston Atoll reported wind gusts between 40—45 mph (65–75 km/h) for two hours. " - Wew lad that's a huge dash, what's going on there?

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"With a total track of 6,500 mi (10,500 km), Hurricane Dora had the second longest track of a Pacific hurricane, behind only Hurricane John of 1994" - This is a rounded value, so let's throw "about" or "roughly" etc here too.

Done--12george1 (talk) 04:25, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

A long list but not particularly hard to correct. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 19:42, 9 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]