Talk:Hurricane Dolores (1974)/GA1

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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contribs) 00:13, 20 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

"With peak winds of 80 mph (130 km/h), the storm made landfall near Acapulco." - Link mph and km.
- Basic units aren't linked :P Cyclonebiskit (talk) 00:54, 20 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Once onshore, Dolores rapidly dissipated and was last noted on June 17." - This sentence is a bit confusing...You say it dissipated rapidly over land, and then you say that is was last noted on June 17, which is saying that it may not have actually dissipated, but was just last observed in that location...Additionally, the track map shows the last point as a hurricane, so I would say something like "Once onshore, Dolores moved north-northeast, and was last noted on June 17".
"Numerous roads sustained damage, separating communities form surrounding areas." - Typo
- Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 00:54, 20 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Tracking westward, rapid development ensued the following day and the system was classified a tropical depression around 12 UTC." - Unlink "Tropical cyclongenesis (development)" as it is already linked in the lede.
- Stylistic, I link by section for convenience Cyclonebiskit (talk) 00:54, 20 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Shortly thereafter, satellite intensity estimates indicated further strengthening and the storm was cyclone upgraded to Tropical Storm Dolores." Extra word there.
- Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 00:54, 20 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"A banding eye-feature developed later that day, indicating Dolores to be near hurricane strength." - Same story as Tropical Cyclogenesis...Unlink as it is already linked in the lede.
"Around 00 UTC on June 16, it is estimated that the storm intensified into a hurricane, with sustained windspeaking at 80 mph (130 km/h)." - Instead of 00 UTC, try 00:00 UTC or 0 UTC...I know I am being picky, but that doesn't look right.
- There's nothing wrong with it, 00 is the way to list hours and 00:00 is technically incorrect. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 00:54, 20 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Once onshore, rapid dissipation ensued and Dolores was last noted early on June 17." - Same deal as the second comment I made.

Overall, this article is good...As soon as you fix these issues, I shall pass the article. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:13, 20 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, being as you have fixed most mistakes, and plan to fix the last one soon, I am passing the article. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:03, 20 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]