Talk:Hurricane Danny (2015)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 23:25, 14 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Mention the year in the lead
"After becoming a tropical storm later that day, dry air initially slowed further development" - don't use two references to different times. Cut the "initially" for sharper focus
Is it worth mentioning the peak sustained winds in the lead?
- It's in the infobox so I don't think it's entirely necessary. I'll add it if requested, though. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 23:37, 14 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"Embedded within monsoon flow,[4] low wind shear, above-average sea surface temperatures,[2] moderate moisture content, and favorable diffluence enabled gradual development." - lots of stuff there, but the sentence structure could use improvement.
"A subtropical ridge to the system's north steered it generally west-northwest throughout its entire existence." - don't use "it/its" twice in the same sentence, try using the antecedent (the low/system). If you don't want to say "system" twice, get rid of the first mention ("A subtropical ridge to the north")
I love the usage of the note to explain the more wonkier details of the MH
- ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 23:37, 14 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]
" they convened to discussion potential preparations" - wordo

I think it's worth mentioning that Erika affected the same areas as Danny just three days later. I appreciate the link in the external links section, but with such a short article (but long enough IMO), it could use a bit more info for context. All in all a good article though, and that GA icon shouldn't be too difficult to attain. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 23:25, 14 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Made the recommended changes and added the bit for Erika. Thanks for the review, Hink! :) ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 23:37, 14 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]