Talk:Hurricane Chantal (1989)/GA1

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Reviewer: TheAustinMan (talk · contribs) 23:40, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hello GC, we meet again! I will be reviewing Chantal '89. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 23:40, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

"...three tropical cyclones to make..." you could link tropical cyclone
Would it be better if "Trinidad and Tobago" was linked together as Trinidad and Tobago, because, they're pretty close to eachother.
"...Chantal became to quickly strengthen and became a hurricane on August 1." The first became does not make sense.
"...later on that day." Do you need 'on?'
"The storm quickly weakened upon moving inland and weakened to a tropical storm a few hours after landfall. Early on August 2, Chantal weakened to a tropical depression and dissipated over Oklahoma by August 4." You use quite a lot of 'weakened's. Maybe you could use differing word choice, such as 'degenerated' for one of them?
"...produced relatively small tides, with most locations reporting waves less than 4 feet (1.2 m) in height. As a result, some locations experienced extensive beach erosion." I don't know about you, but it seems odd that there are pretty small tides, but then in the next sentence is mentions /extensive/ beach erosion.

Fixed all of the above.--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Meteorological history

Just clarifying, did you mean "tropical weather lookouts" or outlooks?

Well, you might wanna "lookout" for a tropical cyclone.--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"...until reconnaissance flight." You need an 'a.'

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Link Dvorak technique.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"...with the National Hurricane Center satellites using the Dvorak technique to indicate t-numbers range from 2.5–3.5 within just twelve hours." This sentence doesn't quite make sense. Within twelve hours of what? I think instead of that sentence, you could use "...with weather satellites indicating t–numbers increasing from 2.5 to 3.5 within twelve hours using the Dvorak technique."

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Based on these discoveries..." I don't know about discoveries, is observations a better term?

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"After landfall, Chantal rapidly weakened to a tropical storm just five hours after landfall..." If you list the time after landfall, you don't need the 'after landfall' part in the beginning.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"...quickly degenerating to tropical depression early on August 2." Degenerating should be degenerated, and you either need 'a' before tropical depression, or strength after tropical depression, whichever one you choose.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"...eventually reaching New England ^[3] and Newfoundland just before Hurricane Dean approached." Instead of having a floating ref in the middle of the sentence with no punctuation, you could move it to the end of the sentence.