Talk:Hurricane Carlotta (2012)/GA1

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 22:25, 10 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hi TheAustinMan, I am going to review another one of your GAN's, if you don't mind.

"Carlotta developed slowly into a tropical depression from a tropical wave." - When and where was this? Was it on September 1 near Fiji or southwest of Central America on June 14?
"It moved generally west-northwestward and by the following day" - There should be an indication of the date in the previous sentence if are you going to say "the following day". Shouldn't be a problem when the previous issue is fixed.
"Rapid intensification ensued further, as Carlotta peaked as a 110 mph (175 km/h) Category 2 hurricane on the same day prior to making landfall, eventually becoming the easternmost landfalling Pacific hurricane in recorded history." - This is sort of a run-on sentence. Crammed into one sentence is RI, peak intensity, landfall, and a landfall record. Maybe it should be something like this: "Rapid intensification ensued further, as Carlotta peaked as a 110 mph (175 km/h) Category 2 hurricane on June 15. At 0100 UTC on the following day, Carlotta made landfall near Puerto Escondido, Mexico, at the same intensity".
Only two lines of impact in the lead? What about like the 29,000 homes and 2,500 businesses damaged and/or the peak rainfall total?
Use this webpage here to prove that your conversions from Mexican Pesos to U.S. Dollars are correct or else it might be considered OR.
"On June 12, a tropical disturbance developed off the west coast of Costa Rica, moving westward and entering the eastern Pacific after crossing Panama." - Might be better to say "On June 12, a tropical disturbance developed off the west coast of Costa Rica, moved westward and entered the eastern Pacific after crossing Panama."
"the depression was located in an area of low wind shear and warm sea surface temperatures, which were favorable for intensification." - Low wind shear and warm SST's are already favorable conditions. Why not instead say "the depression was located in an area of low wind shear and warm sea surface temperatures [insert either comma or & ndash;] conditions that are considered favorable for intensification."
"When the system was first classified as a tropical cyclone, the government of Mexico issued hurricane watch and a tropical storm watch for a portion of the Mexican Coast" - Hmm, which part of the "Mexican Coast"? Cozumel? Baja California? Matamoros?
"Later that day, the watch was upgraded into a hurricane warning." - Again, you cannot say "that day" or "the following day" if the date is not mentioned in the previous sentence.
There is a bit of an inconsistency with the names of the authors in the reference. For example, on Reference #2 there is "Todd Kimberlain", but "Berg, Robbie" on Reference #16.

Thank you for your quick response. I will now list this as a Good Article.--12george1 (talk) 01:01, 11 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]