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Hello! My name is Anniina and I am currently an undergraduate at Rice University. I am in Poverty, Justice and Human Capabilities class, and for an assignment for this class I am going to start revising and expanding this article on Human trafficking in Finland. I am planning on building a whole new structure of sections and subsections, redistributing the existing information into these new sections as well as adding new information. I want to talk about the specific laws in Finland that deal with human trafficking. The victims and the help the victims receive are also going to have their own sections. I would like to include a more comprehensive section on the prevention of human trafficking in Finland; what kinds of organizations there are, how the public health sector contributes and what challenges there are for the preventing work that takes place. I will also find more sources and work on improving the citations of the existing article. My goal is to improve this article as much as possible, and therefore I would gladly welcome any tips, ideas or advice anyone might have. Thank you! AAla-Seppälä (talk) 21:37, 26 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Hi Anniina,
This article looks great so far, you've clearly put a lot of work in. I only have a couple of comments, but you're doing a great job. There were only a couple of areas that I saw that could use improvement and they seem like easy fixes. One thing that I might do is move the headings down that describe the number of the articles in laws so that it is below the heading instead of included in it. I would also suggest reducing some of the longer sentences, but other than that, I think that the article is excellent and very comprehensive. — Preceding unsigned comment added by BSchilling (talk • contribs) 01:29, 31 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Overall this is a solid article, but there's a lot of work necessary before it can reach good article status. My comments as follows:
Structure and prose:
For an article of this length, the lead really should be longer than one paragraph and adequately summarize the entire article. The lead also shouldn't need references except in exceptional cases, as the content should be in the article body (for example, the detail about the US State Department's classification.)
Leaving aside the length, I found the lead also didn't do a great job explaining the topic to me, and it's an introduction to issues with jargon and overfamiliarity with the topic that impact the quality of the article. I don't necessarily know as a reader what the standards of the EU Protocol are, or why it's so important, nor do I necessarily know what NGOs are, and 2013 may or may not be the latest information available to highlight, but it's weird that seven years ago is being given such prominence. What are third sector organizations? Etc.
According to Eurostat's 'Trafficking in human beings': Who is Eurostat, and why do we care?
The structure of the article throughout feels a little slipshod. We've got old numbers and new numbers, and they're stacked on top of each other and filled with less-than-encyclopedic language, e.g. To some extent Finland is also considered a source country for human trafficking. (what is a source country? Who says 'to some extent'?)
If there's only a sentence or two on their own in a paragraph, that's a good indication the paragraph needs fleshing out, the details should be rearranged to be more cohesive, or the information is trivial.
The full text of the penal codes is probably not relevant for the encyclopedia, and I don't think should exist in an unsourced translation at the very least.
The article has virtually no information giving any history of the subject, which seems like a glaring oversight; you'd be mistaken for treating trafficking as a 21st century problem only. The subject often veers towards just prostitution, rather than trafficking in prostitution or trafficking more broadly. I think the article needs additional research to be broad in coverage, and a lot of massaging to keep focused and comprehensible.
According to research conducted by Lehti and Aromaa,—this is a giant quote that seems weird to not summarize, and especially to end the article with.
Citations and references:
The entire "human trafficking" section is unsourced.
Spot-checked statements attributed to current refs 1, 4, 12, and 13. Did not spot issues with improper attribution or sourcing errors. Publications appear to be reliable sources as required by standards.
Media:
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This article is the subject of an educational assignment at Rice University supported by the Wikipedia Ambassador Program during the 2015 Spring term. Further details are available on the course page.