Talk:Human/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 20:52, 16 July 2021 (UTC)

• Add alt text to every image in this article.
  • Alt text is not a GA requirement. I will work on them if you insist, but it might take a while. Aircorn (talk) 08:03, 25 July 2021 (UTC)
• "In common usage the word" → "In common usage, the word"
• "2.8 million year old" → "2.8 million-year-old"
• Remove the comma after "branched progression".
• "In the 5th century BCE history" → "In the 5th century BCE, history"
• "In Africa the Kingdom" → "In Africa, the Kingdom"
• "In West Asia the Achaemenid Empire" → "In West Asia, the Achaemenid Empire"
• Add a comma after "the fall of the Western Roman Empire in 476".
• Add a comma after "this same time period".
• "super powers" should be written as one word (see article).
• "early 1800's" → "early 1800s"
• "enhancing exchange of resources" → "enhancing the exchange of resources"
• "Through invention humans" → "Through invention, humans"
• "overconsumption and combustion of fossil fuels has" → "overconsumption and combustion of fossil fuels have"
• Remove the comma after "in some individuals".
• "Through history human populations" → "Throughout history, human populations"
• "body weight and body type is" → "body weight and body type are"
• Add a comma after "the 23 pairs of chromosomes".
• "hundreds of thousand" → "hundreds of thousands"
• "harbour" and "labour" → "harbor" and "labor" (consistency)
• "which are private" → "that are private"
• Remove the comma after "development in the human".
• Add a comma after "in developing countries".
• "to a painful labor" → "to painful labor"
  • Not sure about how this improves the sentence. Aircorn (talk) 08:03, 25 July 2021 (UTC)
• Remove the comma after "time periods".
• Add commas after "for example" (both times).
• "Central African Republic" → "the Central African Republic"
• Add a comma after "the developing world".
• Remove the comma after "in human culture".
• "and the way in which they are prepared" → "and how they are prepared"
• "more lower" → "lower"
  • I feel more is needed here. Aircorn (talk) 08:03, 25 July 2021 (UTC)
• Add a hyphen between "chromosome related".

• "debate over what extent" → "debate over to what extent"
• "processing of the things in experience" - reword
  • Done Aircorn (talk) 08:03, 25 July 2021 (UTC)
• "the mental processes'" → "the mental processes"
• "which can be defined" → "that can be defined"
• Add a comma after "in which case".
• "behavioural" and "practised" → "behavioral" and "practiced" (consistency)
• "as of quality" - reword
• Resolve the tag.
  • That has been resolved Aircorn (talk) 08:03, 25 July 2021 (UTC)
• "all the diverse human societies" → "all diverse human societies"
• Remove the comma after "locally occurring".
• Is "auditively" a word?
  • It is [1]. Changed to audibly as that is more common. Aircorn (talk)
• "Art is a defining characteristics" → "Art is a defining characteristic"
• Is "musics" a word?
  • I think this is alright in this case. We are talking about multiple different ethnic musics, not a single type ethnic music. Aircorn (talk) 08:03, 25 July 2021 (UTC)
• "humans musical abilities" → "humans' musical abilities"
• "synchronised" → "synchronized"
• "30,000 year old" → "30,000-year-old"
• "humans capabilities" → "humans' capabilities"
• "species of animal" → "species of animals"
• "In many societies it is" → "In many societies, it is"
• "social organizing principle" → "social organizing principles"
• "who identify" → "that identifies"
• "Also there is no" → "Also, there is no"
• "on what" → "of what"
• "ethno-political" → "ethnopolitical"
• "obtaining power and ability" → "obtaining power and the ability"
• Optional for this article but try to archive references.

Thanks for the review. Will work through these. Aircorn (talk) 00:07, 19 July 2021 (UTC)

Sorry, life got in the way. Many of these were done by other editors while I was away. I have made the other changes or have left a comment above. Thanks for reading the article and your useful review. Aircorn (talk) 08:03, 25 July 2021 (UTC)