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Reviewer: SL93 (talk · contribs) 05:18, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]


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  • "Hum Aapke Dil Mein Rehte Hain (English: I Live in Your Heart) is a 1999 Indian Hindi-language romantic drama film directed by Satish Kaushik and produced by D. Ramanaidu for his banner Suresh Productions."
  • I suggest changing "banner" to company or something similar. It isn't often that the word banner is used in this way.
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "It starred" and "playing supporting roles".
  • Starred should be changed to stars. Playing would better as "in supporting roles".
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The film telling the story"
  • This should be "The film tells the story".
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "served as a remake"
  • Should be "serves as a remake". Better yet, it could "is a remake".
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "and lyrics are penned by"
  • "and the lyrics were written by"
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "garnered well-response from audience"
  • This sentence should be removed entirely per my next point below or it should be made clear that it's not from critics.
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The film received mixed-to-positive reviews"
  • Are these reviews from critics?
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "with mostly critical praise was directed"
  • The word "was" is not needed.
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Plot section

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  • "The pampered Vijay has completed his education and now indulges in life's temptations to the extreme."
  • How does he indulge in life's temptations to the extreme?
Removed --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 06:45, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Megha is Vishwanath's personal assistant in his office. She is a hardworking girl struggling to support her family."
  • Instead of two sentences, this can be combined into one sentence due to both of them focusing on the same character.
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:48, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Vishwanath asks Megha to quit her job and marry his son, but she refuses when she hears Vijay's strange condition."
  • Why would she ask Megha to do that? What is the strange condition?
Changed --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 06:45, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Vijay wants the marriage to be on a contract basis for a year and, if he does not fall in love with his wife in that duration, the marriage will be annulled."
  • Why does Vijay want that?
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 06:45, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "However, Megha's family is in dire financial straits and, so, she has to reconsider this offer."
  • How will the marriage give wealth to Megha's family?
I think the sentence is clear now --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 08:07, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In return for marrying Vijay, she asks for financial support for her family, which Vishwanath readily provides."
  • Why did Vishwanath readily provide financial support?
I think the sentence is clear now --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 08:07, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "when he meets with an accident"
  • This part sounds unusually phrased. What is the accident?
Changed, a car accident --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 07:59, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "At the end of the year, however, Vijay decides to annul the marriage, as had been agreed upon."
  • Why did Vijay decide to do that? It seemed like a happy marriage from the sentence before it.
I think it's better now --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 08:15, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "After the separation, Vijay seems to be enjoying himself; but slowly and eventually, he starts to feel a longing for the presence of his devoted wife."
  • Why does he feel that longing?
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 08:16, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Complications arise when Megha finds out that she is pregnant with Vijay's child."
  • What complications?
It's already cleared... --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 08:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "People in her neighbourhood start to question her stay at her mother's house and the identity of the child's father."
  • Why are they questioning those things?
That's a normal thing when a woman suddenly get pregnant, while she's not with her husband or doesn't have a husband. As we know that India has many norms. In my country, it also happened --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 08:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In order to support herself, Megha gets a job in a new company"
  • "starts a job"
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:49, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Vijay continues to pursue her and leaves no stone unturned to show her that he cares for her."
  • What does he do to show her that?
Concise --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 08:40, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Vishwanath and Vijay attend the ceremony as well and give her presents"
  • It should be clarified as to who is receiving the presents.
  • "An argument follows; Vijay and his father walk out, followed by all the guests."
  • What is the argument about?
Removed, as this part is unimportant. --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 08:42, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Near the completion of her pregnancy, Megha learns that troublemakers Khairati Lal and Yeshwant Kumar, who had once attempted to kill Vijay, have escaped from prison."
  • This plot point seems to have came from out of nowhere.
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 08:43, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "On the way, she learns that the whole thing was a set-up by Vijay's friends to lure her back to her husband."
  • Why did her friends want to lure her back to her husband?
  • "As soon as she meets him, she accuses him of this shameless act."
  • What shameless act?
  • "Vijay then staggers towards her, with his stomach pierced by a piece of glass and blood pouring from the wound. It turns out that Khairati and Yeshwant have attacked him in reality."
  • I'm confused. There is no transition anywhere from the last plot point to the stabbing happening. Why add "in reality"? I didn't think that the film was based in a virtual world or something.

I'll rewatch the film, so i can match the plot section; i watched it a few months ago, i'm so sorry... --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:35, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

SL93 I think the plot section is clear now, you can review it now :) --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:43, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Production section

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  • "was remade from"
  • "is a remake of"
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:36, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "and marking"
  • "and it marks"
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:36, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "comeback to"
  • "return to" sounds better
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:36, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Meanwhile, Kajol who almost twenty years younger than him was cast as the film's protagonist"
  • I don't see how it is relevant how much younger she is.
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:36, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "was done"
  • This part doesn't sound encyclopedic. A different word other than done should be used.
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:36, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Some songs were shot"
  • I think you mean "Some songs were recorded"
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:36, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Release section

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  • Produced under the Suresh Productions banner"
  • It seems like the word banner can be removed. Maybe change it to "Produced by Suresh Productions"
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:37, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "According to review aggregator website Rotten Tomatoes, it was available for streaming on Prime Video since May 2019."
  • This would be better as "It was available for streaming on Prime Video since May 2019" due to it not being a controversial statement.
Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:37, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

References

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  • How are Planet Bollywood and Bollywood Hungama reliable sources?
Aitraaz, which is a featured article, uses a source from Planet Bollywood. Bollywood Hungama is a big and famous entertainment portal, and has established in 1999. Many articles like Kareena Kapoor, Preity Zinta and Shah Rukh Khan use it. --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:39, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Awesome. You can consider this part as completed. SL93 (talk) 05:40, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Everything matches the references and this should be good to go after these issues are resolved. SL93 (talk) 05:20, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Nicholas Michael Halim Will 7 days give you enough time to watch the film? SL93 (talk) 05:42, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Yeah... --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:46, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I made some minor edits and this is approved for GA now. SL93 (talk) 13:56, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions: SL93 (talk) 13:56, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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