Talk:Hugh Daily/GA1

GA Review

Lead

Done*Change the date of death as per WP:DATE.
Done*"for seven different teams in three different leagues (the National League, Union Association and American Association)." Don't put the names of the leagues in brackets. If they are worth mentioning, re-write it to do so.
Done*"when he won 20 or games twice," What does this mean?
Done**I know what a win means. But the sentence doesn't make sense; it's incomplete. Peanut4 (talk) 22:42, 26 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I restructured the sentence, divided it into two... makes better sense? Neonblak (talk) 00:33, 27 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

It still doesn't make sense. Look at just the clause; "He twice won more than 20 games." I simply don't get it. With one club? In one season? In his career? It's completely non-sensical at the moment. Peanut4 (talk) 01:09, 27 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I gave it another try, hopefully it makes better sense.Neonblak (talk) 11:50, 27 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I'm still not sure. I've had a glance through the text and think it means he won 20 games in the season. The problem is because he had so many clubs, it's not apparent whether it's 20 in one season or 20 for one club. If it is season, make sure you don't use "season" twice in one sentence. Peanut4 (talk) 12:23, 27 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ok... switched it up a little, it now incorporates a direct indication that they are seasonal. My belief is that whether he did it for one team or two is established by the previous paragraph. Let me know what you think.Neonblak (talk) 05:06, 28 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Much better. It wasn't so much how many teams he did it for, it that wasn't the point, it was the fact it didn't make any sense or have the right context before. Peanut4 (talk) 21:47, 28 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Done*"and was out of organized baseball completely shortly thereafter." Needs a subject for the verb.

Career

Done*"Recently his reported 19-strikeout game was unofficially upgraded to 20" Change recently. It means nothing in five years time or so.

General

Done*Make sure you put a non-breaking space between numerals and units, e.g. 29 games. See Wp:MOSNUM.
Done*Scorelines should use an endash per WP:DASH. Similarly I think "win/loss" should be "win–loss".
Done*Are there any images?

A few things to do, but nothing substantial so I'll put it on hold. Peanut4 (talk) 21:53, 25 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for reviewing this article, and I will make these changes tonight.Neonblak (talk) 04:20, 26 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

All the suggestions have been implemented, except for any pictures. There is only one known picture of Hugh Daily, and the only location of it is in a book. I could scan the page its on and lift the photo, but I don't that's legal. The credit for the photo in the book is for a company that would probably charge a fee.Neonblak (talk) 11:11, 26 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Short but it meets the criteria. All the best with any expansion or improvements you can make in the future with the article. Peanut4 (talk) 21:48, 28 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]