Talk:Hubert William Lewis/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 08:21, 23 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I will take this one. Comments to follow in due course. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 08:21, 23 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks very much Zawed. I've branched out a bit here from my usual editing area, so apologies if there's any obvious issues. Kosack (talk) 08:41, 23 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

This is in pretty good shape. I've made a few tweaks, but there are still some areas that need a bit of work.

"Lewis lightly nicked him": who is "him ' here? The reporter or Bradbury? -Reworded
Rather than "Military Career" as a heading, which is suggestive of a professional soldier, I suggest "First World War". - Done
"organised by Major Birt,...": This suggests some antecedence when in fact there isn't. Suggest "organised by a Major Birt,..." - Done
"Lewis, who was 20 years old": but the first sentence says he was 18? - Reworded
In a few places, ranks are capitalised when they aren't being used as title. Eg it should be "Captain Name", "Name was promoted to captain" - Done
The way the London Gazette is dealt with isn't quite right. See Frederick Fisher (soldier) for an exemplar. Also, the quoting from the gazette isn't accurate instead it looks to be a near copy of the text from the vconline ref. - Done

Hope you don't mind, but I have slightly rejigged this section to make a better connection between the action and the award. I also moved the image; because of the orientation of the subject (the car looks to be moving from right to left) it works better facing the text. Zawed (talk) 22:56, 2 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- No problem. Kosack (talk) 05:48, 3 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"300 yards": do a conversion to metres. - Done
In the main body of the article, after first instance of Victoria Cross, add a (VC) and then just use VC thereafter. - Done
The later life section reads uncomfortably close to the text of the vconline ref - Trimmed and reworded
Image check: Infobox has a fair use tag but for Guggs, if the author is unknown, can we be confident about the author's life plus 70 years tag?

In all honesty I'm not sure, I'm not great with image licensing and this wasn't my upload. Happy to remove if you're not happy with it. Kosack (talk) 14:49, 27 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I'm not great with image licencing either so that makes two of us. I think the copyright tags just need amending. Since we need to have a US tag, I think deleting the life plus 70 years portion of the existing tag and then adding one for the UK where the author is anonymous may be OK. Maybe use PD-UK-unknown? The photo may have been published in a newspaper at the time so you may want to have a quick scan of UK newspaper archive websites as well. Zawed (talk) 22:56, 2 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

No dupe links (no action needed)
one dab link - Seaford - Done
The external links worked OK for me although have to AGF on the Sinclair ref since it requires a subscription.

That's about it for me at this stage. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 10:28, 27 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Zawed: Thanks very much for the review, I've addressed all of the issues listed above and replied regarding the image. Let me know what you think. Kosack (talk) 14:49, 27 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, a couple of comments above for consideration, but this is almost ready to go GA. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 22:56, 2 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks @Zawed:, I've made the adjustments to the image licensing. Can't seem to find any use in a newspaper via Google images, the Times Digital Archive or Newspapers.com. Kosack (talk) 06:03, 3 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

This looks good. I am happy that this artcile satisfies the GA criteria: it is wellwritten in neutral text and is appropriately referenced, appears to broadly cover the subject, stable and includes images with suitable tags. Passing as GA now. Zawed (talk) 08:23, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]