Talk:How the Ghosts Stole Christmas/GA1

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Reviewer: Glimmer721 (talk · contribs) 21:38, 20 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

This was actually submitted to USA Today by a reader, and therefore isn't Whitney Matheson's and also fails WP:RS
"John Keegan from Critical Myth, however, gave both parts of the episode 6/10..." Wait. Isn't just a single episode, not a two-parter?
Link "Monday"
Not sure "mostly positive reviews" in the lead cuts it; 2 more negative reviews are given. I would change it to "The episode mostly positive reviews, although some critics..."
On first mention of the characters in the plot section, give their full names and their actor in parentheses (consistant with most X-Files episodes)
Watch for contractions (couldn't, it's, doesn't, wouldn't, etc.)
"Scully call their fear an irrational fear that all humans face."
Isn't "floor boards" one word?
"Mulder doesn't listen to Scully's analytical view, instead, he's tries to find a door that will open." Comma before "instead" also needs to be a semicolon.
"...Scully marches bravely into the room to discover a massive library room full of book shelves, a lit fire place, and lights on." Does it really matter that there are book shelves, a lit fire place, and the lights are on? I would just say "massive library". In the next paragraph you could say "...its eccentric features, such as..."
"...they discover two corpses beneath the floor..." Remove "beneath the floor"; we know they're underneath the floor boards.
"...a time of intense lighting." When was this?
"Scully is told that Mulder will kill her, just like her future self seen in the floorboards." Is this supposed to mean she will end up in the floorboards? (Could they really tell from the bodies that Mulder shot her?)
Link Chris Carter in "Conception and writing".
"left" and "right" are typically italicized in captions
"...which features Mulder and Scully pull themselves across the floor, bleeding profusely." pull → pulling
"...decrepit, but not to decrepit" Should be "too".
Isn't the last paragraph in "Conception and writing" more appropriate in "Casting and filming"? I would move that to the latter section and move the casting info up, making it "Conception and casting" or "Writing and casting".
"Carter agreed to meet her and the two discussed possible ideas for futures shows." Episodes?

I will place this on hold for 7 days while issues are addressed. Glimmer721 ^talk 21:38, 20 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

OK, I believe I've fixed all the issues!--Gen. Quon (talk) 01:23, 21 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good! :) Glimmer721 ^talk 01:53, 21 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]