Talk:Hot Coffee (minigame)/GA1
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 03:23, 12 August 2022 (UTC)
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[edit]If I have demonstrated incompetence or caused offense, please let me know. –♠Vamí_IV†♠ 03:23, 12 August 2022 (UTC)
Prose
[edit][...] "include new functionality and interaction in line with the 'vibe' of the game" [...]
Appears there's a missing or errant apostrophe in here.[...] and he collaborated with a modder in the United States to create the mod.
First mention of any specific mod.- The lead should probably talk about how RockStar lied about creating Hot Coffee rather than just leaving it at their initial and short lived silence.
GA progress
[edit]Images are relevant and free/tagged. –♠Vamí_IV†♠ 03:23, 12 August 2022 (UTC)
No copyright violations. Note to future reviewers, if you run Earwig's, the similarity likelihood is as high as it is because of the amount of direct quotations used in the article. –♠Vamí_IV†♠ 03:23, 12 August 2022 (UTC)
- Customary ping @GhostRiver, as the review has been sitting around for close to a month. IceWelder [✉] 21:50, 8 September 2022 (UTC)
- @Vami IV: Since GhostRiver seems to not be reponding, I would like to finish up the article to not let your now one-month-old review go to waste. I have made some copyedits to article, including changes I believe should address your latter two points. However, I'm not sure what you would like to have improved in the first one; the quote seems fine to me, with "vibe" surrounded by apostrophes as a quote-in-a-quote. IceWelder [✉] 19:08, 12 September 2022 (UTC)
- @IceWelder: I commend you for your intervention. I will pass the article now. –♠Vamí_IV†♠ 02:48, 13 September 2022 (UTC)
- @Vami IV: Since GhostRiver seems to not be reponding, I would like to finish up the article to not let your now one-month-old review go to waste. I have made some copyedits to article, including changes I believe should address your latter two points. However, I'm not sure what you would like to have improved in the first one; the quote seems fine to me, with "vibe" surrounded by apostrophes as a quote-in-a-quote. IceWelder [✉] 19:08, 12 September 2022 (UTC)
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