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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 18:33, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]


Comments

  • Looks a bit odd with those three massive images in the lead.
  • Green checkmarkY Resized them, added a gallery caption, and moved down to the new "Geography" section where I think it fits better anyway. jp×g 18:18, 14 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Where is the island in each of those images?
  • Green checkmarkY I've made a gallery caption that says it's in the center of the images. If there's a way to superimpose text on the images in the gallery, that might be even better (I'm sure there's a template for it). jp×g 18:18, 14 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Actually, it still looks kind of weird. Not quite sure how to fix it (the caption is centered with regard to the full pagewidth, not the individual images?) jp×g 00:49, 15 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "the San Francisco Bay" is "the" really needed?
  • "in the city of" just "in" is fine.
  • " San Francisco Bay area" our article appears to capitalise Area.
  • As a parenthetical note, I'm not quite sure which capitalization is "canonical". I see it both ways; I think the only time "area" is always capitalized is if you're just saying "the Bay Area" (without qualifying it with anything). But this isn't really that big of a deal (and certainly doesn't matter here). jp×g 03:19, 15 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • What is USGS?
  • Image captions are all fragments so no full stops.
  • There should be no material which is exclusively in the lead.
  • Is there any history for this island?
  • Red X symbolN I could not find diddly-squat; the closest I could get in any source was that it appeared on USGS topo maps (i.e. became separated from the larger land mass) some time between 1899 and 1941. jp×g 01:07, 15 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "As is common on large areas of ground, grass grows on Hooks Island" unnecessary.
  • "which "grows denser than the" you should be able to paraphrase this basically factual quote.
  • "The S. alterniflora, originally" why The?
  • Blue question mark? Specifically, the S. alterniflora referred to in this sentence (the grass that was introduced there in 1973) hybridized with native cord grasses. I guess it's mostly arbitrary and I could rephrase it to avoid this if you want. jp×g 01:06, 15 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "aboveground" this is typically two words.
  • "surface dwellers and animals" what are "surface dwellers"? Are they not animals?
  • Blue question mark? "Surface dwellers" and "animals that lived beneath the mud" as two separate categories, but will edit.
  • "70,000-acre "work area",..." etc. convert.
  • "was a "resounding success"," according to whom?
  • "species.[9][8]" order.
  • " near-threatened[10] California clapper rail." overlinked clapper, put ref at end of seentence.
  • "Island and killing them" -> killing the clapper rails.
  • "the San Francisco Bay area" Area.
  • "The clapper rail majestic." majestic? And no period required.
  • No need to force ref width, just {{reflist}} is fine.

That's all on a quick pass, so on hold for now. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 17:27, 5 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for the review. I will be getting to this shortly. jp×g 02:57, 7 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
JPxG any progress on this? The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 12:22, 11 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
JPxG last call before this gets archived. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 09:39, 13 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Ah, yes. Tomorrow morning. jp×g 10:21, 13 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@The Rambling Man: For various definitions of "tomorrow morning", but modifications have been made. jp×g 02:57, 15 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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