Talk:Honda Super Cub/GA1

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Reviewer: TheQ Editor (talk · contribs) 19:43, 26 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I promised I would review this when I had time. Sorry for the wait though. Thanks! ΤheQ Editor ^Talk? 19:43, 26 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Development

"unlike other Japanese companies did not" change to "unlike other Japanese companies, they did not"

✓ --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:45, 1 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

The last sentence in paragraph 1 is too long. There are too many cases of semi colons.
You don't have to put a citation at the end of every sentence. If you are using 1 footnote to cite multiple consecutive sentences, only cite it at the very end. (not required for GAC)

✓ --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:45, 1 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"His goal was export on a scale" change to "His goal was exported on a scale"

✓? See below. --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:45, 1 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

wikilink die cast

✓ --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:45, 1 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"run at full capacity" - run should be ran

✓ --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:45, 1 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

The picture either needs to be a full sentence or have no period at the end.

✓ --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:45, 1 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Design

There are two "and"s in the sentence of "It moved the engine down and away from the seat," perhaps replacing the first "and" with "it"

✓ fixed Brianhe (talk)

"and it made possible larger wheels." should be "and made it possible for larger wheels."

✓ changed to "made it possible to fit larger wheels" Brianhe (talk)

The sentence "Though some of the many Super Cub variations..." is too long.

✓ split into two, trimmed second sentence Brianhe (talk)

"his was an extremely simple motorcycle," - "extremely" sounds too biased. Cross extremely out.

✓ fixed Brianhe (talk)

File:Honda Super Cub at Seattle Children's Museum1.jpg's caption isn't a complete sentence. Make it a complete sentence or drop the period.

✓ fixed Brianhe (talk)

Why use "@"? Is that a special annotation, if so link to the page.

✓ spelled out "at" Brianhe (talk) 00:15, 1 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"You meet the nicest people on a Honda"

The heading needs to meet WP:Headings. Change it to "Advertising" or anything else you feel appropriate.

✓ Changed to "Advertising campaign that invented lifestyle marketing" Brianhe (talk)

FN 37 doesn't say anything about ""added to the macho Harley image."

Question: I see it in the next-to-last paragraph on page 45. Are you sure you didn't miss this? Brianhe (talk)

Link. --Dennis Bratland (talk) 00:09, 1 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

File:Supercubca100.JPG's caption isn't a complete sentence. Make it a complete sentence or drop the period.

✓ fixed Brianhe (talk)

File:Harley-Davidson Young America advertisement.jpg same thing as above

✓ fixed Brianhe (talk) 00:04, 1 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Model History

~~"until 1967" - what happened? You may want to reword the order of it~~
"After 1980 the USA C70 was called the C70 Passport." - expand on that or merge that in another paragraph.

✓ --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:03, 3 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

FN 41 looks good to me. Consider removing the [better source] tag.

✓ --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:03, 3 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

File:Honda Dream 110i Super Cub ND110M 2014 Right.JPG needs a proper caption

✓ --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:03, 3 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

~~"In late 1960" - should be "In the late 1960s"~~
"When you talk about Japanese" - did the quote ever end?

✓ --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:03, 3 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

@Dennis Bratland and Brianhe: There are still some issues in this section. After those are fixed, welcome the article to GA! ΤheQ Editor ^Talk? 01:30, 3 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I didn't mean before to imply were were done. Now it looks like we've fixed 'em all. Let us know. --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:03, 3 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Current popularity

"The Super Cub was included The Guggenheim's" - should be "The Super Cub was included in The Guggenheim's"

✓ fixed Brianhe (talk) 23:51, 31 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

References

ref 52, 49 and 51 are dead

✓ fixed Brianhe (talk) 23:49, 31 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Questions/comments

"His goal was export on a scale" change to "His goal was exported on a scale"
- Fujisawa didn't want to export his goal. His goal was to have large-scale exports of bikes. Maybe it should say "...was to export motorcycles on a scale..."
Why use "@"? Is that a special annotation, if so link to the page.
- I can't find any preference for @ or 'at' on peak torque or hp. FAs Talbot Tagora and Sunbeam Tiger use @. I wish Torque had fewer physics formulas and more plain English explanations of why we express torque (and hp) this way. I don't know where else to link.
"In late 1960" - should be "In the late 1960s"
- This is from a chart; the year was definitely 1960, per p. 39 of same source. Probably "mid" is more accurate than late, or just "In 1960" if we don't know the month. --Dennis Bratland (talk) 23:27, 31 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]