Talk:Homogenic/GA1

GA Review

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Hi, sorry for the delay due to the Easter Holidays! A very interesting article. I felt free to fix some issues myself to spare us some work. I think it can pass once some comments are addressed:

General comments (explaining what I changed)

• The article is nicely references, but, for the future, please read an article over at least once in its entirety before nominating it - it needed a grammar and spelling checks and commas.
• "While" should only be used when emphasizing that two events occur at the same time, or when emphasising contrast. It shouldn't be used as an additive link.
• Using "with" as an additive link leads to wordy and awkward prose.
• Avoid informal and vague words.
• Links should not be put in quotations.
• Avoid phrases with redundant words.

Other Comments

Infobox

• Is the release 23 September or 22 September as stated in Allmusic? Please provide a source for September 23 or change it.

Y Done.

• cduniverse.com is not a reliable source, but it cites the magazines with release date and page number, so cite directly. Please convert all cduniverse citations that way and search whether you can find the Grammy nominations in a reliable source.

Y Done.

Production Maida Vale sessions

• There is no timeframe given. Does the book state month and year? If so, add dates to this section and the Málaga sessions section.

It doesn't sadly. Everything is just said to take place "after" the tour, while the stalker situation happens, and before Christmas. So it's hard to pinpoint when these things happen. Andrzejbanas (talk) 20:15, 15 April 2009 (UTC)

• "... would get audio engineer Markus Dravs to her make shift home studio ..." - please formulate clearer.
• "The album began with the working title of Homogeneous but later changed it to Homogenic." - who later changed it? add the name or reformulate to "it was later changed to".

Y Fixed, Bjork re-titled it.

• "... Björk allowing Dravs free creativity ..." - what is "free creativity"? say "freedom"

Y Done

• "... only leaving the studio ..." - who left the studio? make sentence clear

Y fixed. Björk left the studio to make the food according to the book.

• "... which Dravs created the skittering beat for." - informal, write something like "... for which Dravs created a fast beat."

Y changed.

Style

• The whole section can be moved under Release to not break the narration and improve the flow of the article.

Y Done.

• Cite Oor magazine directly, the dates and page numbers are given by the website.

Y Done. I'd note that It actually doesn't cite page numbers. But I added an extra reference to the magazine itself as well as keeping the URL for safe keeping. :)

• "... grief flashes of hope." - what is this? please reformulate

Y...gah. I meant Brief! I should learn to write and read before attacking wikipedia.

• Perhaps the explanation for "Hunter", as sourced in I.D. magazine here could be added.

I've added information about the song but most of that music video information would be better suited to the article on the song itself. I've added a song explanation however, as it suggests a different theme then the love songs on Homogenic. I've cited the website as they don't give a month, year or anything for the source except that it was taken from Record Collector magazine.

Release

• "... to both imply and negate Björk's presence ..." - clarify what that means

I've removed this bit of information. It was pretty weak and didn't really go anywhere and they don't go into the album cover very much in the book. Andrzejbanas (talk) 20:30, 15 April 2009 (UTC)

Reception

• use another source for the Grammy Award nominations (as I stated above)

Y Done.

• How is Heather Phares someone with an initial critical reaction? There is no date added to her review.

Y Done, and Good point. Which is too bad, I wish allmusic dated their reviews. I'll change it with something from the Spin article. Andrzejbanas (talk) 20:30, 15 April 2009 (UTC)

• I can't check the archived Pitchfork review, is it still there or gone?

It was there! But it's vanished, I'll keep checking back to see if it ever pops up. Until then, I'll remove it from the article. Andrzejbanas (talk) 20:30, 15 April 2009 (UTC)

Tally

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Hekerui (talk) 16:42, 15 April 2009 (UTC)

For the Maida Vale sessions, add at least the year. However, this is a minor issue and I'll pass the GA now. It's good that this very interesting article was expanded! And for the future, please remember the difference between "then" and "than" :-) Good work! Hekerui (talk) 21:26, 15 April 2009 (UTC)