Talk:Homer the Smithers/GA1
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Looks good. Only a couple of things need fixing:
- We don't need File:Mrburnspolarbear.png. The fair use rationale says its purpose of use is "To illustrate the plot of the episode", but we already have the infobox image to do so. This doesn't accompany any commentary on the episode's production - only one sentence about the polar bear which the image does not illustrate.
- Their plan, however, backfires, and Smithers and Homer engage in a fight - the "however" is jarring and unnecessary.
- Homer goes to apologize - "returns"
- but is turned away by Burns out of fear - "turned away by a fearful Burns"
- the one task Burns still cannot do - "the one task that"
- which Oakley thought "Homer the Smithers" was a good example of - "of which Oakley thought "Homer the Smithers" was a good example"
- He said that they "enjoy" to write - don't need "enjoy" as a quote since it's not emotive
- When Homer goes up early to make Mr. Burns breakfast - "gets up"
- Use − to make a minus sign in "A-".
- The commentary refs say "Team Homer". Wrong episode ;)
I'll place the GAN on hold, so you have a week to make any changes, and hopefully I'll be able to pass the article. Good luck! —97198 (talk) 06:40, 7 February 2009 (UTC)
- All done Thanks for the review! :) TheLeftorium 10:57, 7 February 2009 (UTC)
- Nice work - looks good to pass. —97198 (talk) 12:20, 7 February 2009 (UTC)